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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-12-11 09:26 PM


This is just another show of words,
envoking power, bringing forth a certain freedom.
An acceptance, a distant need for comfort
by one unknown. Only similarity growing from
stems of prose, the thorns of grief stricken
poetry... Don't I laugh?

Of course I do, as I write
bitterly, lovingly,
intellectually.
False, I am a hypocrite,
a liar and a thief.
A murderer of art.

I have stolen my ideals, my philosophies,
I've only learned that which I remember
as a child growing older...

Just
older, crippling age ..creasing skin,
like papercuts in time's wind..

My love, I have forsaken those devotions..
I have given up my pen.

How?

In what way have I discovered peace, though
I have not...
The words in cyclones inhaling my thoughts,
haunting my dreams,
reminding me of those infernal memories..

I did
hurt
the one's that I loved..
Yet still,  I care not..
If you grant me no forgiveness..grant me nothing more..
I have sold my soul, bargained with my strength,
hoped though believing not in hope..

This is like
the rose
that screams
my name as I pass
without comfortable curves in
circular words..

I've allowed myself to become a god in my world,
the flowers are mine,

I keep them alive.

© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
inkedgoddess
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1 posted 2003-12-11 10:22 PM



Just
older, crippling age ..creasing skin,
like papercuts in time's wind..

great thoughts
and the whole piece of owning your own flowers and keeping them alive,not looking back, i like this very much, beating to your own drum

Obscurity
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2 posted 2003-12-11 11:48 PM


quote:
Just
older, crippling age ..creasing skin,
like papercuts in time's wind..

My love, I have forsaken those devotions..
I have given up my pen.

How?

In what way have I discovered peace, though
I have not...
The words in cyclones inhaling my thoughts,
haunting my dreams,
reminding me of those infernal memories..


I believe that we write poetry to escape and expres ourselves and find peace with the angst of life. If life is pallet, then we are the artists, with words as our paint.

I thought it was a beautiful piece, rather bleak but it reminds me of why we choose to write.

Brad Majors
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3 posted 2003-12-11 11:49 PM


I love this
SuperGlueRyan
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4 posted 2003-12-12 12:39 PM


Another one of your fantastic pieces. Don't you dare ever give up your pen. These pieces of "articide" are like mana for some of us.
~Stoic

pandonov
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b/w conscience and insolence
5 posted 2003-12-12 12:52 PM


uf, why am I seeing myself here?...
passing shadows
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6 posted 2003-12-12 03:05 AM


we need someone to keep the flowers alive

awesome write!

alan6501
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7 posted 2004-01-15 11:50 PM


I've allowed myself to become a god in my world,
the flowers are mine,

I keep them alive.


This is such a striking ending!! I can't believe how beautiful you can make poetry. I LOVE your work. Keep it up!!

ctowen
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8 posted 2004-01-15 11:57 PM


Just one more flower to your growing garden Meg ....
   looking alive as ever!


                Truly    *S

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9 posted 2004-01-16 08:30 AM


yes...
ice
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10 posted 2004-01-16 09:13 AM


Kaoru
Bravo! poetry dark and deep, as sometimes the art must be....applause

"Of course I do, as I write
bitterly, lovingly,
intellectually.
False, I am a hypocrite,
a liar and a thief.
A murderer of art."

When I read this I felt as Baudelaire (states in his poem "To The Reader")
a fellow hypacrite, and understood the meaning completely..

Last line, (from "Flowers Of Evil")
"-Hypocrite reader-(you are)-my twin-my brother"

Excellent poetry... this stanza could stand alone as a poem by itself.
_______ice
  ><>


serenity blaze
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11 posted 2004-01-16 10:51 AM


very awesome work lady.

Most impressive.

Terrina
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12 posted 2004-01-16 12:00 PM


I've allowed myself to become a god in my world,
the flowers are mine,

I keep them alive.
I'm loving your poems.
Thank you

LiquidMidnight
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13 posted 2004-01-16 02:39 PM


"without comfortable curves in
circular words"

I don't like this line just for the simple fact I'm not the one who thought it up.

Very nihilistic/existentialist in it's subject matter. (espcially the last 2 lines) The would be a great poem to do at a poetry slam.

LeeJ
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14 posted 2004-01-16 02:49 PM


The power to be has to do with the power of being at home "within", the present moment, of being centered, of living serenely and meditating from the true center.

To love God is to be drawn up and out of ourselves and into Him. In loving Him, I become incarnate of Him.

God descends into us and we are drawn into Him. With Christ, we can say "I love the Father, I do what I see Him do, He has crowned me with glory and honor". Loving all that "is", we learn to die daily to the introspective, self-conscious life.
Wonderful poetry you have created, I hope you don't mind my reply....just thought it might interest you,,,no insult intended..just so you know.

You have got an incredible mind...

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