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KoKo
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0 posted 2003-12-11 11:17 AM


I want to find
Salvation in your arms
But keep falling
On the way there
In your 'saliva.'

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1 posted 2003-12-11 04:44 PM


Whoa, very intense, but I enjoyed it.
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2 posted 2003-12-11 09:47 PM


Yes! Short and .... not sweet.... short and something or other......ah, good. Yes, that's the word.

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KoKo
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3 posted 2003-12-12 01:44 AM


Thank you both! I was a little hesitant about posting...so thank you for the reassurance
Opeth
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4 posted 2003-12-12 07:16 AM


These words leave a lot for the reader's imagnination, although those words are not many.

enjoyed!

"If this grand panorama before me is what you call God...then God is not dead."

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5 posted 2003-12-12 11:55 AM


this is an amazing piece
KoKo
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6 posted 2003-12-12 12:39 PM


Opeth-

Sometimes it's better when it's not all laid out right in front of you, and can interpret it any way you want, but also strive to see what the author's speaking about. Thanks for the read and comment!

Brad-

THANK YOU!!! I'm flattered

dingusjr
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7 posted 2003-12-12 03:32 PM


Nicely done, KOKO.......did I tell you I used to work at a radio station
with the same call letters?    I did.

KoKo
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8 posted 2003-12-13 12:29 PM


dingusjr--

LOL funky

Thanks for the read and comment!

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9 posted 2003-12-13 01:26 AM


i'm a big fan of poems with few words.. when they can make a big impact...

this did just that.
well done.

snow

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if my soul has fallen away?"
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Edder
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10 posted 2003-12-13 10:11 AM


How often is this the case? What happened to romance? Amazing my dear! Luv ya!

[This message has been edited by Edder (12-14-2003 12:11 AM).]

iliana
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11 posted 2003-12-14 02:16 AM


This really made me chuckle -- 'cuz I've been there!!  Hope you find your salivation -- opps, salvation!  Thanks for the poem, I really did enjoy it.


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12 posted 2003-12-14 02:11 PM


Excellent!!

Eric

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