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when hurry hesitates
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when hurry hesitates |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
when hurry hesitates the deafening din of yuletide rush spins itself in quiet reverie a cocoon-like reverential hush for all the world to see ‘tis not the gifting nor the shops though busy as each may be that hurry hesitates, then stops in obeisance to peace and gentility as latin verse is freely canted in ivory walls of commonality “deo gracias, spiritu sancti” openly chanted supplanting orwellian rules of conformity peace, love and hope—momentarily not a stranger gifted to men long ago by this season’s Babe of the manger |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
gifted to men long ago by this season’s Babe of the manger ..and these gifts I wish for you also, now and every day. A lovely poem you've written, here. May I keep a copy? Caroline the only man worth your tears will never make you cry |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Thanks Caroline. Kind comments. As always, you may feel free to keep a copy. Words are in the province of all mankind--their arrangement is duty-free from the Land of Inspiration. |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
oh, so many 10$ words. I enjoyed it  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
tis not the gifting nor the shops though busy as each may be that hurry hesitates, then stops in obeisance to peace and gentility Often times we get caught up in the rat race and lose the true meaning. Thank you for this steavenr~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
steaven, this is quite incredible....I admire the rhyme scheme (abab is very difficult) and the theme is awesomely touching |
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Antonio_L Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 110NorthEast USA |
in ivory walls of commonality “deo gracias, spiritu sancti” openly chanted supplanting orwellian rules of conformity One small part of a wonderfully worded poem. You certainly have a gift for words steaven, would you mind if I secreted a copy of your poem back to my message boards? We have a very special thread called, "The Poets' Arch" where, with your permission, it will rest. You should be able to view it tomorrow. I hope you will all put one or more of your wonderful poems in there. Tony. J [This message has been edited by Antonio_L (12-14-2003 12:40 AM).] |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Thank you pandonov. I’ve paid a lot for those words over the years Thanks, BluesSerenade, you are so right about how we lose our focus. Thanks, passing shadows, I’m glad you liked it. You are too kind. Tony, thank you, and yes, you may. That stanza was the rant portion of the show. I tried to be sweet in the rest of it |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Loved it, loved it, loved it..... Hope the hurry hesitates all season! Best wishes. |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
i don't think i could become more of a fan than i am, right at this moment. :::stands and claps::: ~snow "...why does my skeleton pursue me |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
First, you are an exceptionally talented poet, Sir. I do need to slow down and visit your work more often. As I said before, there is so much I can learn from you. Second, this piece truly touched me. I have been in the "hurry up mode" far too long, and the result has negatively impacted many aspects of my life, the culmination of which can be seen in the events of the last couple of days of my life. A friend told me these events should be taken a speed bumps. It is time to slow down. Then, as I did take a moment to do so, I found myself here...reading your poem, this poem. The universe has spoken! Thank you for this. I am keeping a copy in my personal library, if that is OK with you. And when I become overwhelmed, I will know where to find peace. Patricia |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I hope everyone hurries in to see this read... and hesitates over a response, then quietly add one... to keep this at the top for the entire season. Thank you... [This message has been edited by Sunshine (12-14-2003 08:08 AM).] |
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Antonio_L Member
since 2003-12-01
Posts 110NorthEast USA |
Thank you Steaven, I have posted your poem over in my forums and you may visit it here. We are still having a problem with posting but you can take a look around all you want. The problem we are still experiencing is keeping our members way so there will be very little in the way of comments in there today. Tony. J |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
iliana, yes, and may it be from your mouth to God’s ear. Thank you for your comment Snow, you are putting too much pressure on me, now. Thanks.Patricia, if this small poem helped then I am glad. Thank you (and you certainly don’t have to call me “Sir”) Sunshine, I consider your comments high praise, indeed. Thank you. Tony, I have been to your website now, but will have to return when I have more time. |
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