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Kahlil
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0 posted 2003-12-07 12:48 PM


What if these carved wings
were freed to flutter
ever so slightly
away from my body......


The Yangtze clay
from riverbed birthed
malleable
rich and alive

Molded to form
placed in the fire
submitting to passage
of shape desired

How my heart would sing
if freed to flutter
ever so freely
outside of my body......


Pray, vessels emerge then
ever so boldly
graced with a beauty
of purpose and love

I am clay......


[This message has been edited by Kahlil (12-07-2003 10:32 PM).]

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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2003-12-07 01:10 PM


Kahlil
I like it.

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
2 posted 2003-12-07 01:44 PM


Yes, you are clay! Formed from that of the Yangtze River ~ and fired into the shape of a fine poetess!

Your wings shall be set free with but a moment's thought and put to page.

Fly free, dear poetess! For all is within the realm of possibility for one who possesses such talent.

Loving hugs,
EA

Midnitesun
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Gaia
3 posted 2003-12-07 02:08 PM


a beautifully formed poem
nicely modeled

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
4 posted 2003-12-07 02:41 PM


Kahlil - nice write...

BC

ethome
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5 posted 2003-12-07 03:13 PM


Really nice concept. Well presented here.

Eric

mytuesdaywishes
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a voice from the musicbox
6 posted 2003-12-14 07:24 PM


very expressive
Kahlil
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7 posted 2003-12-14 07:31 PM


Thank you, everyone, for all your supportive comments.   ~K~
iliana
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8 posted 2003-12-15 12:55 PM


Really liked your writing.


Kahlil
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9 posted 2003-12-15 01:00 AM


thank you very much, iliana.  ~K~
passing shadows
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displaced
10 posted 2003-12-15 02:50 AM


awesome! I feel like clay too sometimes!
Kahlil
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11 posted 2003-12-15 08:39 AM


Yes, Dixie, a new beginning....  ~K~
Martie
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12 posted 2003-12-15 11:01 PM


Kahlil...If you are clay, you are a clay poet!
Kahlil
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13 posted 2003-12-15 11:51 PM


I like that!  Thanks, Martie!  ~K~
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