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maximillian
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since 2003-09-13
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0 posted 2003-12-06 06:21 PM


A Whole (In My) Lush Heart

I hang like a deteriorating painting from
a wall that surrounds me with asymmetrical lines.
I hang swinging, swaying, lost
as a pendulum
swinging, swaying, lost.

I hang like a deteriorating painting from
a wall that awaits humane warmth.

I hang swinging, swaying, lost
as a pendulum
swinging, swaying, lost.

I am a painting, but yet I remain unadviced, without critique.
I am a painting, am I beautiful or am I a shade of yellow, which is better?
I hang swinging, swaying, lost
as a pendulum,
swinging, swaying, lost.

I am a painting and
I hang, swinging, swaying, lost.

Held up only by a pin, intwined in my wooden frame,
a pin, a pin.

I hang held by a pin, my pivotal point, my life summed up.

I hang swinging, swaying, lost
as a pendulum,
swinging, swaying, lost.

[This message has been edited by maximillian (12-06-2003 06:22 PM).]

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skyshine
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Beneath the northern stars
1 posted 2003-12-06 11:47 PM


Interesting.....

~sky

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

ecrivan
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2 posted 2003-12-07 05:30 PM


good imagery...shouldn't unadviced be unnoticed or unaware?...my guess is that you're a native French, Spanish or Italian speaker, 'aviser' being the French for 'to be aware of'. Welcome to Passions!

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (12-07-2003 05:33 PM).]

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