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adbdesperado18
Junior Member
since 2003-11-30
Posts 33


0 posted 2003-12-06 12:40 PM


Priority,
Excessive,
Consuming all of you,
Forcing you,
Enticing you,
To neglect me,
Dissmiss me,
Then,
Discarded you,
You mourned,

Mourning
Bridged the rigt,
A rift left
To widen,
All respect gone,
No longer can I glance
Without cringing,
Now,
A relationship
You strive to form,
Sorry,
Attempt arrived
Years too late,
Our bond,
Harshly torn.

You believed,
The priority
Awarded more time,
Though your daughter
Cried out
In pain.

I disregard you
Now,
Just like you
Disregarded me,
My trust,
Betrayed,
No longer
Remains for you,
Still,
Hear crumbles,
Face trembles,
Sobs release,
As silent tears
Stread down
At the mere thought
Of you,
But as I react,
Everything sincere spoken,
Those three words,
Filled with emptiness,
Mean nothing,
Those words,
I feel programmed to utter.

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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
1 posted 2003-12-06 02:44 AM


I have read all of your poetry tonight.
There is such emotion, expressed in strong clear lines...and much pain.

I am glad you wrote here tonight.

Your style is unique, and the content a bit strong for the open forum perhaps...
There is much here to be appreciated.
Also, it takes some time for other poets to get to know you...usually several posts in a row don't get the read that they deserve, because so many good posts need to be read.

I care. ThisDiamond

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