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Winter Blues
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Winter Blues |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ The dreamer in me is a fond memory pulling at my heart strings, where, oh where is the love. My chest rises and falls releasing an assortment of thoughts staggering through better days my breath comes in sighs and I am so tired of crying. Pieces of the past lie broken as I step over them to get where I'm going or where I would like to be always meaning to sweep them up another day when the dust settles. Perhaps when the spring time comes I will find a better way something of beauty to tend to and care for like a flower garden in the shade of the sun that continues to bloom after the summer is gone. In the meantime I look for a purpose a reason to believe in something more than this holding close to all that is dear to me rewriting the words I wish to convey. I've risked it all, and made so many mistakes but I lack the brevity to step outside of today. Instead I keep at arms length to protect the fragility of broken pieces. In time I shall sort through them and find a place to keep them out of harms way. But today, as the cold wind blows across my mind my heart strays, longing to be warm yet the frost blurs my vision, stinging my eyes through another long winter to recall. ~*~ ~revised version of the blues~ |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
well done |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
there is purpose and reason, all you have to do is believe. yesterday is but a memory, tomorrow is hope... |
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pictureme Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 248Ohio, USA |
nice flow to this poem...and I see the sunshine ahead! An enjoyable read for me. pictureme :-) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
don't step over the pieces, KICK 'EM! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i like what dixiechick said, and i can relate, the winter makes one think too much stay warm goldengirl.... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you for reading me~ This was hardly worth a repost what can I say, tis the season, after all. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
.....psst....next time you post one that is "hardly worth" posting....don't tell me that, cuz I'm bound to like it anyway! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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eringobraugh Junior Member
since 2003-12-06
Posts 16Michigan |
The third stanza is memorable. I liked the entire piece and it flows quite well, but the third stanza is special. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Bluesy - you're too darn pretty to let those blue eyes cry those tears. They are blue, are they not? My best to you... BC [This message has been edited by Bill Charles (12-07-2003 10:53 AM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...Just hugging you... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Like Marti, I'm just hugging you too, Lori...... |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
“This was hardly worth a repost” On that point you are indeed mistaken my friend! From beginning to end this is magnificent, in my humble opinion! "A spring shower was cause to run |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lori, so glad i went digging around this evening! this is so powerful...your writing is just so damn pretty, and your soul even more beautiful! happy holidays and best wishes, amy  "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Seems to me I finally found where you found your name... a wonderful serenade, m'dear... |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
yet the frost blurs my vision, stinging my eyes I haven't been able to keep the leash on my heart either, looking for a nice fire to warm it up but it is afraid to step inside and stretch out into the warmth. I'm with you... wait for spring and coddle the flowers "in the shade of the sun". You really do write so beautifully. I'm so impressed with your talent! Hugs Caroline the only man worth your tears will never make you cry |
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Serena Renae Junior Member
since 2003-12-04
Posts 48Ohio, USA |
I very much enjoyed this piece. I was drawn back to a memory in my mind as I was reading. I can relate to this poem completely...well done. Love, Serena |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"I've risked it all, and made so many mistakes" At times, it is the only way to live, to seize the meaning of life. Without risk there is only...age. |
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