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ecrivan
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0 posted 2003-12-05 12:45 PM



When one man's life is hooked onto others
where on independent decisions he did not bother
separate choices are smothered by needs to adhere
to the decisions of another he'd hold so dear...


I'd prefer to get to the source of the game
find why the vine clings...let's throw no blame
it latches onto the elm that offers moisture
that tree's staunch support gives it posture...


Yet if that dependent be of minor age
there is reason for him not to engage,
in adult decisions that he has not incurred
in adult ways that he has not yet endured.


Some grow up on independent grounds
decisions are formed out of bounds
where flamboyant lives pour over cup brims
or choose to live dependent on alien whims




[This message has been edited by ecrivan (12-05-2003 11:52 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-12-05 12:47 PM


Martin, I enjoyed this write very much.
Yes, how sweet it is to follow your own star.

ecrivan
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2 posted 2003-12-05 12:50 PM


YOU BET as J. Gleason would say.."how sweet it is"..thanks for sharing


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3 posted 2003-12-05 02:32 AM


this is the type of poem that works the kinks out of brains...reads very smoothly
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4 posted 2003-12-05 03:07 AM


I always love your insight and wisdom Martin...
ecrivan
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5 posted 2003-12-05 11:57 PM


Maybe, I wrote this to look back on my dependencies...or I might have a keen sense
of understanding when and how a person should speak for himself...I think one has to be dependent and realize its uselessness before any solid changes can occur


[This message has been edited by ecrivan (12-06-2003 12:02 AM).]

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