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Ericc
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0 posted 2003-12-04 10:08 AM



Perhaps it's only the wind that
greets us?

Even as this familiar air hints of
something more.

Every dawn holds a blade of indifference.

One world is cleaved as two.

Perhaps only the wind remembers this
taste of whole existence?

While we just sniff the later dreams
that linger.

And head towards another day.

Our face...against the sweetest
breeze.

© Copyright 2003 Eric P McCarty - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-12-04 10:16 AM


Exquisite writing Eric!
Hugs~

~ Let peace begin with me...

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2 posted 2003-12-04 12:11 PM


Yes, a lot of good thoughts in here.

~sky

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

cosmic-duality
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3 posted 2003-12-04 12:37 PM


I admire your style of keeping it short and very meaningful. this line sticks out to me
  
  While we just sniff the later dreams
              that linger

passing shadows
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4 posted 2003-12-04 12:45 PM


perhaps
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5 posted 2003-12-04 12:47 PM


Beautiful, as always, dear Eric!!
Hugs  
Ethel

jaicie114
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6 posted 2003-12-04 09:25 PM


Dear Eric....

Absolutely incredible as you always are.

Thank you...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

steavenr
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7 posted 2003-12-04 09:28 PM


Great poem.  Loved the powerful line:

"Every dawn holds a blade of indifference."

A Romantic Heart
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8 posted 2003-12-04 09:37 PM


perhaps this is the sweetest of sweet poems from you... ~ARH

True poets don't write with the ink of quill or pen, but with the ink of their heart~

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9 posted 2003-12-04 09:46 PM


Ericc...You write beautiful!
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