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Brad Majors
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0 posted 12-03-2003 12:41 PM       View Profile for Brad Majors   Email Brad Majors   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Brad Majors


Wishing dreams never uttered
For dedicated love songs never sung
Some Daddy's girl would have
Been have swept off her feet
But frozen like department store mannequin
Just stands there
Phone plastered to his ear
"Hello"
But no ones home
And soon turns to dial tone
As he slumps over
Lost in his sad world of almost
Now older
alone
Left to fantasize
What could have been?
Pictures of her
line his walls
candles scented
With her lavender perfume
Like some cultic shrine
Music plays what could've been
Their song
He lies on his king-size bed
imagining
the life he almost had
In the Back room of
His parents house.
© Copyright 2003 Dan Mauro - All Rights Reserved
marcel
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1 posted 12-03-2003 12:48 PM       View Profile for marcel   Email marcel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for marcel

the words in this piece almost come to life, it is described so perfectly that it had me in that same room. very real situation and expressed deeply. thanks for sharing
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2 posted 12-03-2003 12:54 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

I understand the bitterness
Brad Majors
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3 posted 12-03-2003 12:56 PM       View Profile for Brad Majors   Email Brad Majors   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad Majors

thank you
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4 posted 12-04-2003 02:14 AM       View Profile for bbent   Email bbent   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit bbent's Home Page   View IP for bbent

Always loved the way you tend to end your poems,that little suprize that puts the iceing on the cake...Damn,I'm gonna be spending a week or two with my folks soon,hope I've forgotten this by then.lol

Live like it's your last day...
Dance like nobody's watching...
Love like you've never been hurt...

Ericc
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5 posted 12-04-2003 09:40 AM       View Profile for Ericc   Email Ericc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ericc

Wow...!!

Eric
LeeJ
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a new day dawns within each of your poems...very well done, Brad...thank you for sharing, smiles and hugs
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7 posted 12-04-2003 11:56 AM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

Ouch! Brad I can feel this one.  Hugs.
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8 posted 12-04-2003 01:26 PM       View Profile for Brad Majors   Email Brad Majors   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad Majors

thank you
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9 posted 01-22-2004 12:57 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

just wanted you to know,
I've read this twice, Brad,
and heard the heartbeat
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10 posted 01-22-2004 01:00 PM       View Profile for muted   Email muted   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for muted

**ive got that same obsession**
and i'll just echo
*WOW*
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This one broke through to me.

Very good!

WildPoet
 
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