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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-12-03 03:43 AM


Shoulders slooped
by way of life
slow hands hurry up the deal
a magnifying glass
in hang
between the aged breasts
concealed
by modesty of apron starch
pigment simply can't be licked
back upon the weary lips
edges faded, ages spot.

Thump the trump.

She used to pound
the colors
of the cards revealed--
now she just sneaks fervantly
trying not
to drink too fast
turning just the edge of deal--

the players say she marked the cards.

"Dig your grave--it's just like spades!"

She laughed until her teeth fell out.

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Brad Majors
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1 posted 2003-12-03 07:56 AM


well done
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2 posted 2003-12-03 09:28 AM


Karen...You captured much in this scene...including me.  
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Canada eh.
3 posted 2003-12-03 09:32 AM


Whoa lady!!  Brilliant write!
Love ya..
Hugs~

~ Let peace begin with me...

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4 posted 2003-12-08 07:25 PM



Sometimes I have to wonder where you found such a great muse.  Another excellent write!

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5 posted 2003-12-08 07:40 PM



I met some of your "neighbors" in a geographic sense while on board the good ship Elation...I reveled in their sound, and smiles, and thought, of you.

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6 posted 2003-12-09 07:28 PM


smiles at Kari--interesting that you should say "neighbors" as this was is a composite of that neighbor lady (the one who sent you the recipe) and my mother-in-law, who related a tale of having to pick up her teeth in a restaurant after blowing out the candles on her birthday cake.

Both of them just priceless.

Thanks for reading this one, folks. There wasn't a deep message hidden in this one (no matter what my shrink thinks)

Just a little portrait of some coon ass ladies.

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