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jaicie114
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On the edge of forever

0 posted 2003-12-03 01:35 AM


(AN: First...I rarely "rhyme"...you'll see why.
Second...I have no idea what an "ode" is...it just seemed to want to be called that!
Third...this is sooooo out of my realm...I have no idea WHERE it came from!
WHEW!)


On my long drive home today
I saw a rainbow in a fountain spray.
In the middle of a retention pond
with asphalt terrain all around.
And detritus of urban decay
was everywhere in blatant display.
It bemused me so to plainly think
Of God's attention to a scene so bleak.
If only we had the eyes to see
Spirit's true identity,
In all the things we do and say
We just might have more peace today!

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-12-03 02:17 AM


we just might...but I ain't holdin' my breath


jaicie114
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Posts 750
On the edge of forever
2 posted 2003-12-03 02:30 AM


Awww...Dixie...

First...thanks for the reply...and, please, dear...do NOT hold your breath on that as I truly enjoy your art and would not want to be without it.

Second...I thought I was the only one crazy enough to be up at this time of night! Yowzer!

Love and Light...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

Ericc
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3 posted 2003-12-03 06:17 PM


This has a nice,gentle flow Jc...and as always your message shines bright.

Love,
Eric

steavenr
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4 posted 2003-12-03 10:13 PM


"If only we had the eyes to see"

So much in life in missed because we do not choose to have such eyes.  Excellent, thought provoking.

jaicie114
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since 2003-09-27
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On the edge of forever
5 posted 2003-12-03 10:36 PM


Eric & Steaven....

Thanks, guys...I always appreciate it when you read my poems...even the "weird" ones!  LOL

Love and Light...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

Earth Angel
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6 posted 2003-12-04 12:36 PM


jc, I loved it! You captured that moment and shared it with your readers! This is truly a wonderful little gem of a write!

Nighttime hugs,
EA

jaicie114
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 750
On the edge of forever
7 posted 2003-12-04 08:27 AM


Thanks for the read, EA...

I'm glad you liked it!

Love and Light...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

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