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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2003-12-02 07:26 AM


Rain of Moments

They rain, douse my cast of head
Moments that are past and dead
Drench me in their spill of drain
Some of joy and some of pain

They wet me down and out the fire
Smother the new of my desire.
Cover me with smoke of night
And choke the hews of palette light.

They crash and fizzle on my heart
Splash and sizzle on depart
Dissolve the embers into mud
Each moment’s drop of sound and thud

They drain the energy of flow
Within a hearth of long ago
And hover over birds that fly
Like threatening clouds and lightning sky

They follow me in endless stream
And swallow me in senseless dream

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LeeJ
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1 posted 2003-12-02 07:39 AM


which brings you to the place you are...a much much better man....

Good morning luv...thanks ever so much for this musical peace.  


Enchantress
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2 posted 2003-12-02 08:53 AM


Good morning Sy!
Love to wake up to your words each morn.
You write often of dreams and dreaming..which I love to do.
~Morning hugs & tea, Nancy~

~ Let peace begin with me...

Kahlil
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3 posted 2003-12-02 09:02 AM


Good Morning!  I'm familiar with this rain. I like the imagery of your feelings.  ~K~
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4 posted 2003-12-02 09:10 AM


They follow me in endless stream
And swallow me in senseless dream''''

Ahhhh yes, I know this so well....such beauty found in these words...

Lauren~  

I had a dream last night
you came to me on silver wings of light
I flew away with you in painted sky
Was it real
Is it what you see,touch or feel

Ericc
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5 posted 2003-12-02 11:00 AM


Beautiful flow and wording!

Eric

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6 posted 2003-12-02 11:15 AM


They crash and fizzle on my heart
Splash and sizzle on depart
Dissolve the embers into mud
Each moment’s drop of sound and thud



Hello Seymour  
I especially like this verse about
"fizzle" and "sizzle".  LOL
You are so cute!!
Hugs to you, my friend        
Ethel

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2003-12-02 12:02 PM


LeeJ
Thank you for the read.

Nancy,
Love and hugs, Sy.

Thank you Kahlil.

Sweet Lauren.

Thank you Eric.

Ethel
And you are a love.



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8 posted 2003-12-02 12:22 PM


"And swallow me in senseless dream"

Hey Seymour, I was waiting for something like this at the end. Enjoyed.

poe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

passing shadows
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9 posted 2003-12-02 12:24 PM


what imagery! I always love to wake up to you, even in the afternoon
Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2003-12-02 12:45 PM


It's always nice to be enjoyed by Poe. LOL

passing,
Even in the afternoon. LOL

scorpio
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11 posted 2003-12-02 04:00 PM


Words and images painted on a canvas page.  Well done Sy!

believe in what your heart feels...

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2003-12-02 05:16 PM


scorpio
So nice of you to say that.

Earth Angel
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13 posted 2003-12-03 12:20 PM


Begone, "Rain of Moments"!!! Torment not, this illustrious sonneteer!

Let there be only Sunny Moments to fill his heart ~ and his nights!

Sweet Dreams, Dear One!

EA

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14 posted 2003-12-03 12:22 PM


Thank you so much. Makes me feel so good.. *hugs*

Love,
Ladycat

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beautiful of the arts, because it is no mere translation
or abstraction from life; IT IS LIFE I

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15 posted 2003-12-03 05:12 PM


And there's no escaping them... you only have the protection of making more moments... and making them ones of comfort and joy. *S* Excellent write, my friend. *S*

[This message has been edited by suthern (12-03-2003 05:13 PM).]

Kethry
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16 posted 2003-12-03 05:19 PM


Ah, and without the rain of moments how arid our lives would be.
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Seymour Tabin
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17 posted 2003-12-03 06:53 PM


Earth Angel
Now with you nearby they will all be sweet.

Ladycat
Your feeling good makes me feel good.

suthern
Exactly,

Kethry
How true, how true, Hugs.


Jes
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18 posted 2003-12-03 09:09 PM


Smile this is words and thoughts of true wisdom but also, a thought full past.

" They follow me in endless stream "
" And swallow me in senseless dream "

Smile i liked this one great reading.

Smile

Jes


Seymour Tabin
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19 posted 2003-12-03 10:04 PM


Jes,
My humble thanks.

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