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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores 
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Pardon Me … ~*Marge Tindal*~ Pardon me if I cry at the sound of goodbye for it gets to me every time So sad the refrain as the whistle of train disappears in retreat down the tracks of defeat goodbye … goodbye … goodbye~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Well crafted, although a touch sad! "A spring shower was cause to run |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
No goodbyes from us, dear Marge. Nicely done write. I am glad I am here and you are a big reason in the beginning, the reasons grow as I get to know more poets. Nicely written piece too. Sparticus Even with insects- |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I don't care for goodbyes myself--though I did like your poem, Marge.  ~sky Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Affects a lot of people the same way Marge. This is so nicely put the way you've written this. Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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Guardurthoughts Member
since 2001-10-16
Posts 66 |
Goodbyes can be the most heart-wrenching thing but for me goodbyes are really never goodbye...but really "see you later." because to me true goodbyes...are eternal ~~~Gaurdurthoughts~~~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes...i know |
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Betty Senior Member
since 2002-08-13
Posts 1159Virginia |
I really like this Marge Betty |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Hello has such a nicer ring, doesn't it? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marge, We'll just have to stop sayimg goodbye. Well done.  |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear Marge: I can remember lying in bed at night, in the far north and listening to a train's mournful whistle disappearing in the distance and feeling so sad! This evokes the same feeling! Love Betty Lou Betty Lou Hebert |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
This is so sad and beautiful  |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Well done. Just enough here to make me feel it, and not so much as to overdo. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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titch k Member
since 2003-11-25
Posts 123 |
wonderful age old communication, shared beautifully, thanks marge love Titch |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Good-bye? Hell-o? Should be "hell-bye" and "good-o"! lol Farewells are best said "hasta luego"! ~ See you soon! A very effective presentation of au revoir sentiments!  EO |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hell Marge So very beautiful, yet so very sad. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Saying goodbye is so hard to do. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
I so appreciate each thoughtful reply to this little piece~ From www.dictionary.com Alteration (influenced by good day), of God be with you. Word History No doubt more than one reader has wondered exactly how goodbye is derived from the phrase "God be with you." To understand this, it is helpful to see earlier forms of the expression, such as God be wy you, god b'w'y, godbwye, god buy' ye, and good-b'wy. The first word of the expression is now good and not God, for good replaced God by analogy with such expressions as good day, perhaps after people no longer had a clear idea of the original sense of the expression. A letter of 1573 written by Gabriel Harvey contains the first recorded use of goodbye-"To requite your gallonde [gallon] of godbwyes, I regive you a pottle of howdyes," recalling another contraction that is still used. But life experiences and the night-train whistle is my real inspiration for this little penning from my heart~  It fell to the page in less time than it takes a teardrop to cascade~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Marge - never say goodbye, just see ya later... No tears then my dear... BC |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Always say goodbye, as if you may never see them again....not because it's true, but because it's the best insurance that you will.... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge/sis Perhaps that's why a train's sound is so forlorn? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This weeps gently into my heart... beautiful work, dear lady. |
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Beasley Senior Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 682Cheboygan,MI USA |
Dear Marge, This is very nice. It brings back memories when I had to leave Georgia and say "good-bye" to my daughter and then return to Michigan. I really liked this poem and I have liked everything that I have read so far that you have written. Barb |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
OH, this is a sad one, dear lady. I heard a train crossing a track a few days ago that made the sound of distant drums. Hugs! Corinne |
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