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Jes
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0 posted 2003-11-30 12:15 PM


Cute is only those who cute can be !

You or me ?


Smile

Jes

[This message has been edited by Jes (11-30-2003 12:26 PM).]

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-11-30 12:22 PM


Jes, I notice that you use the words "be" and "me" and I wanted to let you know that there is only one "e" in those words, unless you want to write about a "bee" (which is the stinging insect)

I know it's hard to learn the English language, but you are doing well, and I enjoy your poetry very much...

hugs,
Dixie


[This message has been edited by passing shadows (11-30-2003 12:24 PM).]

Jes
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2 posted 2003-11-30 12:26 PM


Thanks dixie i will change that right away smile

And thanks for telling, i enjoy your poetry as well.

Smile

Jes


passing shadows
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3 posted 2003-11-30 12:30 PM


Well done Jes!

I am not a teacher, so I usually can't be much help in explaining things, but you are an easy learner...

the change looks so much better now!

good job

Keep on writing...I'll always read and enjoy you.

Jes
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4 posted 2003-11-30 12:31 PM


Smile

Thanks for the thumb


Jes


ParisGrl
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5 posted 2003-12-01 09:14 PM


Jes,

Cute poem!  I enjoyed it.

Laura

Jes
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6 posted 2003-12-02 02:52 AM


Gald ya enjoyed Paris girl

Smile

Jes


Sadelite
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7 posted 2003-12-02 08:26 PM


Jes,
   I liked the rhythm of this--it's catchy!
                          Sadelite

Jes
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8 posted 2003-12-03 12:23 PM


Smile

Glad ya enjoyed - Sadelite

Smile

Jes


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