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ethome
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0 posted 2003-11-30 07:05 AM



On a mission after graveyard booty
from a prison where she lost her time
she's calling through the pain to weave her story
about mistaken minds.
She comes out of the heart where the tears start running
like a river flowin from the veins
she lost her lifetime expectations
where she played the wrong game
a soul sacrifice.

By the graffiti walls where the night trade calls
she passed the sad moment of truth
now she tries her best to give new direction
to the spoils of youth.
Through the faded halls where the shadows fall
there's a third floor room she turned to
where the night light flames were flickered remains
of a fire passing through
a soul sacrifice.

Bridge:
Her tears fall from her visions and dreams
her words cry like the wind in the trees
She calls to mind her first vision
a family home by the sea                            

Now the time has come and it's bitter
and the guests and the score lists are gone
she threw away her chances, missed her calling
and she's got to move on.
But the warning's the same the bell tolls away
and the message sounds another day
She's not sure who's gonna listen
but she's gotta have her say.
a soul sacrifice
in the future she passed...not coming back... fade


© Eric True


Ain't doin nothin at all
Just answerin the call
Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~

[This message has been edited by ethome (11-30-2003 11:42 AM).]

© Copyright 2003 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2003-11-30 07:45 AM


ethome
A well done write, enjoyed.

Martie
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2 posted 2003-11-30 02:42 PM


Eric

The rhythm of a song mixed with compassion.  As always, I enjoyed!

PsychoticBunni
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3 posted 2003-11-30 03:24 PM


haunting, creepy, scary. i don't care if halloween was in october that ghostly story was eerily wonderful!

Meg

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4 posted 2003-12-02 02:33 PM


Good stuff! I like the concept, soul sacrifice...there are so many ways that happens.

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5 posted 2003-12-02 04:32 PM




(big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, your heart beams with compassion and love and I know this person you speak of will be deeply touched by this song! (sigh) I hope to hear more audio recordings of your songs soon, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Sadelite
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6 posted 2003-12-02 08:16 PM


ethome,
   You grabbed my attention from the beginning:
      
     On a mission after graveyard booty
from a prison where she lost her time
she's calling through the pain to weave her story about mistaken minds.
                  
Thank you for posting this.
                              Sadelite

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