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Magnus
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0 posted 2003-11-27 06:21 PM


Quietly I stand beneath the sill
of stone cold window nigh.

Awaiting a plan,  oh yes...I will
before the dawn's first cry.

As dew does wet the waiting vine before
the climb to thee.

I stand alone,  just one in line,  a duet
waiting to be.

To arms they call into the night upon the
sight of my face.
Appalled of all,  and in such fright...
my steps I now retrace.

I wait dear heart beyond the moat of
waters dark and so deep.

To pen of two,  a welcome start upon
one's climb most steep.

I am here....patiently resting,  the iron
is hot,  yet cooling.


© Copyright 2003 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
Margot
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1 posted 2003-11-27 06:50 PM


Magnus,

An excellent poem, walks with words into my soul

Margot

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2003-11-28 06:57 AM


"I stand alone,  just one in line,  a duet
waiting to be."

Very nicely penned, Magnus!  You've captured the longing and wait beautifully in this. I loved the visuals in the line above. Excellent!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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3 posted 2003-11-28 07:23 AM


Magnus darling man, this is absolutely brilliant writing, you know I’ve always had a fondness for your Knights in waiting there’s no one who writes them better than you do.

I’ve not been around here for far too long, but you know why that is, when I do visit, and these days its more often than not the archives, I like to restore my soul by reading the best of the best and that always includes you. Exquisite writing darling man absolutely one of your best. Utterly, utterly, perfect

Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy


Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

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4 posted 2003-11-28 08:26 AM


Barry, very creative writing.  You captured a mood and expressed it eloquently.

believe in what your heart feels...

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5 posted 2003-11-28 08:31 AM


Barry,
You have plucked the tenders of my heart.
Excellent write.

Magnus
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6 posted 2003-11-28 08:36 AM


Happy Turkey Day to all of ya....hope you
didn't stuff yourselves as much as the bird?

I slammed this out,  trying to drum up some
duet business...but alas,  I still stand
beneath the window...my tunic covered in
snow and mud...stomach growling from lack
of so much as a mere crumb of bread...

Sob, sob, sobbbbbbb.....

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7 posted 2003-11-28 08:48 AM


Magnus...

This is very moving...and, I'm soooo sorry that you're still awaiting your duet. It will come, dear man. (I know these things!)

Thank you.

Love and Light...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

Gentle Spirit
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8 posted 2003-11-28 01:53 PM


Awaiting a plan,  oh yes...I will
before the dawn's first cry.

Barry I can identifie with this line,
very much today...
well done Sir.

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9 posted 2003-11-29 01:52 PM


good things come to those who wait...(or something like that)
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10 posted 2003-12-01 02:46 PM


Ye must strike whilst thy iron is hot! If ye shouldst wait much longer, thy iron will cool and be of no good use, m'lord!


EA

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