Spartanburg, South Carolina
Well, it's good to know that I can follow your line of thought. I figured it was someone talking to themselves on some level. What I didn't get was "youth". If you want to stick with that, then you need to work on this piece, because even knowing what you intended, I've reread it several times and it still doesn't come across.
That and one other thing: "(Bathing in the preformed history of current maturity?)" What the hell kind of psychobabble is that? That didn't make a bit of sense.
Technically, it's a good piece. Heck, I even liked it. My take on it was someone caught in a corporate hell who one day finally looked himself in the mirror (instead of his reflection in a computer screen) and realized he didn't recognize himself anymore.
So don't get me wrong, I liked the piece, but it needs to be overhauled.
I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry.