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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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In thought about the count on the hill the ladies waited in his audience, so still he brandished an abacus and began to count in the audience tense whispers had to mount.. What do I say about the count on his hill the one day he decided to swallow a magic pill invited the ladies of the court to wine and dine each thought they were especially attracted to his kind Do you see modern man does much the same behave as though women were just fair game? that male worlds are set free of female clutter and chauvinism has not abated from his stutter... He'd brandish a mental abacus, as in days of yore when women had to keep the hearth warm before.. he'd count foreign trophies and victories each day as his descendants would tabulate their net pay; and used to come home from a successful hunt today that measures less than a clever stunt... [This message has been edited by ecrivan (11-27-2003 12:25 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
another thought-provoking write Martin...indeed |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
a short woven tale of bygone aristocratic gigolos and the unchecked self-admiration of many of their chauvanist descendants.Thanks for sharing [This message has been edited by ecrivan (11-27-2003 12:24 PM).] |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
A wonderful story in such lyrical words...great job. Eric |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
still one wishes there were better..thanks |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ecrivan, I loved the ryhme in this poem. and, as alwys, you have written an excellent thought-provoking poem.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ecrivan, You have driven the nail to the head. LOL |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear Writer, I would like to echo your reply to passing shadows! lol I couldn't have said it better myself!  ~ however, I would like to add that I enjoy the varied and interesting themes that drip from your poetic pen. I find them all fascinating reads! Warm hugs & appreciative smiles, EA |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Thanks Sy and Linda, we'll see how long my word portraits can continue to illustrate this and any forum... I had only to think of 'unreal' day jobs to get the last lines on this..me oh my [This message has been edited by ecrivan (11-28-2003 11:35 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
ecrivan -- good question? Good answer, sadly. .........BEEEEEwell. |
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