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It's Another Day
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It's Another Day |
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Doug Pretorius Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 81Ontario, Canada |
It's Another Day November 24, 2003 Copyright 2003 Doug Pretorius It's another day to carry out under my arm I think I forgot which way I was going to go A midnight breeze brushes by my face like silken panties diamonds and lace I think I lied about something once or twice I can't remember if it was important or just to be nice Feeling kind of angry about the friends I left behind it's a twist of fate that's stuck in my mind The sun goes down again and I think I'm finally alone but wouldn't you know it there goes to phone It's another day to help those fallen behind a strange kind of saying that no one believes It was just like this the day I was supposedly born I remember the bright lights and the doctor's face, I've sworn It's another day to carry off as our own It's another day to feel so alone amongst a sea of faces and subtle child embraces It's another day to sweep under the rug to tear off on a tangent and become completely unplugged It's another day to remember who you are to listen to the one above to carry on in freedom and sing about love [This message has been edited by Doug Pretorius (11-24-2003 09:14 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 Welcome back! or is it my imagination, you've been away from Pips for quite a while?Enjoyed this look at the day, especially, that ending. Yes, Doug, any day is a good day to sing about love. |
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Doug Pretorius Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 81Ontario, Canada |
Definitely not your imagination. I've been without writing inspiration for many months, but things are beginning to flow again. Thanks for noticing! |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
I LIKE this so much! I like the progressive steps of a process, many of which I've experienced. Everytime I read it, I see myself. Thank you very much for sharing the write. ~K~ |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
after re-reading, I think this is my fave: "It's another day to carry out under my arm I think I forgot which way I was going to go" going to be looking for more of your "stuff"...~K~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
So many solid new poets we are getting now -- well done! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderfully uplifting write...I enjoyed so much |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
wow this is really something! i've read it twice and both times came away with something different, so i'll read it again  very powerful write though, that is for sure! just wow take care. amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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