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Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2003-11-24 02:58 PM

I gave you my heart;
you took away my innocence...
I asked for something in return
and you responded,
"enough."
It was my voice
that tagged the walls of the pyramids
searching for the passageway
to the eternity
of your love.
If my words mean nothing to you,
disregard this,
but somewhere in Africa,
where the land is fruitless and dry,
the tribesmen will recite my poetry
to their goddess,
and the clouds will rumble
with a thunderous cry...

Check out my poetry here:

http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master

[This message has been edited by Master (11-25-2003 12:56 AM).]

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

1 posted 2003-11-24 03:17 PM

well done

J. K. Mitchell
Member

since 2002-01-12

Posts 311
GA

2 posted 2003-11-24 03:43 PM

Nice...

Hockeychick19
Member

since 2002-10-29

Posts 430
Massachusetts, USA

3 posted 2003-11-24 03:55 PM

Wow... Nicely done.

~Kelly~

Life is a gift so live it to the fullest!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

4 posted 2003-11-24 04:37 PM

I like this very much... it's good to read your work again! *S*

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

5 posted 2003-11-25 09:43 AM

wow! this was an amazingly
brilliant write...few leave me
speechless but i believe you have!
take care,
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2003-11-25 09:59 AM

Master~
Such a poignant penning~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
noles1@totcon.com

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2003-11-25 12:54 PM

damn...that's good

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2003-11-25 05:40 PM

masterful...James

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

9 posted 2003-12-17 01:16 PM

A veryyyyy well written poem...
Enjoyed this a whole bunch...
Bumpity Bump this thread should be back2the top...

Smiles2uPoetFriendMaster
*~coco~*

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