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James_A_Fraser
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0 posted 2003-11-24 02:38 PM



Tiny Hooks

it molds to your curves,
fastens down the front
with twelve tiny hooks

bought it for me, you say,
and midway through a kiss
I know it's true

I have four of them unfastened
before you notice....

© Copyright 2003 James A. Fraser - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-11-24 02:54 PM



Clever, clever writing...
[even better thinking!]

eor
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2 posted 2003-11-24 03:06 PM


lol

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

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3 posted 2003-11-24 04:16 PM


LOL... Sounds as though she bought you the perfect present! *S*
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4 posted 2003-11-24 04:18 PM


nice
Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2003-11-24 05:19 PM


James~
Perfect !!!
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
       noles1@totcon.com   

James_A_Fraser
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6 posted 2003-11-24 10:39 PM


Well, number five did get my hand smacked!

(ask me if it was worth it....go ahead, ask....)



~~J

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7 posted 2003-11-25 12:16 PM


ROFL... I don't think we need to ask. *G* Your response is written in that ancient font known as "satisfied smirk." LOL
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8 posted 2003-11-25 12:43 PM


awesome write!  

I love this!

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9 posted 2003-11-26 07:04 PM


Great poem brought a smile

Margot

alan6501
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10 posted 2004-01-05 08:55 PM


great stuff. funny and clever
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11 posted 2004-01-05 08:59 PM




Onward James~  

wickedbeautifulpoetry
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12 posted 2004-01-05 09:01 PM


Great poem...
Subtle brilliance.

-katie-

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13 posted 2004-01-07 01:27 PM


I must have been away when you first posted this....verra cute, James Fraser!
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14 posted 2004-01-07 02:47 PM



LOL like crazy @ Suthern's reply !!!

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
         noles1@totcon.com

James_A_Fraser
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15 posted 2004-01-07 03:13 PM


Me too -- got me the perfect present but then wouldn't let me unwrap it!



~~J

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16 posted 2004-01-09 04:03 AM


Hmmmmmm/////smooth writing!
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17 posted 2004-01-09 04:59 AM


wow! I remember this...glad it came back around
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