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brian sites
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0 posted 11-24-2003 03:01 AM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for brian sites


I look up
        and see
half a sky
  half
        my harbor

I have bound
     myself

to this
      lined  cliff-face
willingly
  or not

but these iron bands
keep me safe
against the real
                 hard
             cold     rock

oh
      they BITE

but they
         are
           familiar
yes

and then

            a voice
sings from the air about

saying
           trust
and I

yearn
               strain

resenting
the bindings I made...

I crack them
        

     and slowly fall

down and away
    from the face
of old
castoff
     bitterness

and float

             no

FLY

to the light

that made
  the shadow
         of my
             charade
          dance
    on the rock
behind my bound form

   falling
into your sun

     as a key

             unlocking


         all the treasures
            
within    
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serenity blaze
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1 posted 11-24-2003 03:03 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

trust

passing shadows
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displaced


2 posted 11-24-2003 03:57 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

AWESOME! YES!
vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...


3 posted 11-24-2003 04:17 AM       View Profile for vlraynes   Email vlraynes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit vlraynes's Home Page   View IP for vlraynes


...just smiling...

beautiful, Bri...



When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

[This message has been edited by vlraynes (11-24-2003 04:34 AM).]

ambrish
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4 posted 11-24-2003 05:10 AM       View Profile for ambrish   Email ambrish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ambrish's Home Page   View IP for ambrish

really liked it.
littlewing
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5 posted 11-24-2003 07:06 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Good God No one could have said it better Bri . . .

beautiful
*smile*
BPW
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (11-24-2003 07:07 AM).]

Sunshine
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6 posted 11-24-2003 08:29 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

             no

FLY

to the light

that made
  the shadow
         of my
             charade
          dance
    on the rock
behind my bound form

   falling
into your sun

     as a key

~*~

You indeed have the key, Brian...
you always have.
Jason Lyle
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7 posted 11-24-2003 09:30 AM       View Profile for Jason Lyle   Email Jason Lyle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jason Lyle

nice, Brian, nice

Jason
Brad Majors
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8 posted 11-24-2003 09:56 AM       View Profile for Brad Majors   Email Brad Majors   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad Majors

well done
Snow
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9 posted 11-24-2003 10:02 AM       View Profile for Snow   Email Snow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Snow's Home Page   View IP for Snow

love the words
and what you do
with them.
snow

"...why does my skeleton pursue me
if my soul has fallen away?"
~p.neruda

littlewing
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10 posted 11-25-2003 08:56 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

this needs to breathe . . .
Duncan
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11 posted 11-25-2003 09:16 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

"FLY

to the light

that made
  the shadow
         of my
             charade
          dance
    on the rock
behind my bound form

   falling
into your sun

     as a key

             unlocking


         all the treasures
            
within"

That's about as perfectly as I've ever heard it said...
xmutexelationx
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since 05-16-2003
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AmongstTheCharredFieldsOfSnow


12 posted 11-26-2003 08:57 PM       View Profile for xmutexelationx   Email xmutexelationx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for xmutexelationx

Hello Brian, it's been quite some time, and it's very understandable if you don't remember be by Sara, or PoeticGoddessOfDepression.
Nonetheless, this poem of yours is just.. brilliant.  I can find no other words to describe it.  You have no idea how thrilled I am to see you still posting.  Keep it up, and take care.
[sara]

[This message has been edited by xmutexelationx (11-26-2003 08:57 PM).]

ThisDiamond
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13 posted 11-26-2003 10:28 PM       View Profile for ThisDiamond   Email ThisDiamond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ThisDiamond's Home Page   View IP for ThisDiamond

It is all about trust...
Well done Brian. Really enjoyed your write.
TD
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside


14 posted 11-27-2003 01:50 AM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade



Whoo yeah!!    

vlraynes
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15 posted 12-01-2003 05:39 PM       View Profile for vlraynes   Email vlraynes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit vlraynes's Home Page   View IP for vlraynes


...because this is beauty

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

Martie
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16 posted 12-01-2003 05:44 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

brian...Amazingly beautiful!
Ratleader
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17 posted 12-02-2003 02:10 AM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

Third time back since somebody pointed me to this one.... time to say, dang this is good!

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SharaRose
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Somewhere out there~


18 posted 12-02-2003 02:20 AM       View Profile for SharaRose   Email SharaRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SharaRose

Wow....Whoa....talking about one falling into the other...this is it! Wow...makes it  complete!
Love,
Terri~
Aimster
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19 posted 12-02-2003 03:33 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

wow...this is just an awesome write, no
other way to say it...brilliant! i will
def be looking for more from you!
take care.
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

Gentle Spirit
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20 posted 12-04-2003 01:42 PM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

Hey Brian, this is just awesome!
incredible talent you have....
garysgirl
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21 posted 12-04-2003 01:58 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

FLY

to the light

that made
  the shadow
         of my
             charade
          dance
    on the rock
behind my bound form

   falling
into your sun

     as a key

             unlocking


         all the treasures
            
within


Brian, this is absolutely beautiful.......
just pure beauty....and so true when one falls...
Hugs  
Ethel    
Dark Angel
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22 posted 05-08-2004 05:28 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Splendiferous Brian!

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

 
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