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Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2003-11-24 02:07 AM

He loved her.
Indeed he did
even gave her
her very own pedestal of gold
bejeweled with all the gems
he thought her personality matched.
sought to pull down stars
to make angels salute her
as they passed by
whispering with their wings
that she
was the only one
who could ever keep the title
of Angel.
But she knew he was wrong
and he still loved her
'til the end of his heart
til some night
she scratched the beginning
of another goodbye into his world
all his promises
of no matter what
always in friendship
came crashing down
just as hard as that pedestal
he gave her came.
But she had warned him
fairly
and honestly
no decisions made in haste
(a promise for herself not so long ago)
Love is love
no matter how far away
and patience is the virtue
that it thrives on.
In several fleeting moments
she almost gave in
to the hands that held on
when no one else could
to the love in his eyes
(although she did not return it)
to the tenderness of his voice
when his songs were singing
to an audience of Her.
It all felt secure
and so here
in the moment
and her life had been driven too far
down dark highways
by mere moments
of unthinkingly
and blindly following love
just because it was offered
and not because it was shared.
Love offered
should be shared
right?
Not anymore
she understands.
He doesn't
perhaps some day he will
but he still loves her
although she colored the white wings he gave her
in the purest of black
when she shattered her pedestal
(as it always happens)
her heart
and his own
in the flailing fall
back down.

I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU!

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2003-11-24 08:15 PM

quote:
But she had warned him
fairly
and honestly
no decisions made in haste
(a promise for herself not so long ago)
Love is love
no matter how far away
and patience is the virtue
that it thrives on.

So is honesty, yet sometimes, it still isn't enough, is it? A poignant poem, dear poet.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2003-11-24 08:33 PM

TemptyOne~
There is a fragility to this piece that speaks your heart~
Very tender penning~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
noles1@totcon.com

Varuch Elohim
Junior Member

since 2003-11-10

Posts 41
Italy

3 posted 2003-11-24 09:06 PM

Great work. You have a great talent.

Varuch Elohim

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Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

4 posted 2003-11-24 09:14 PM

Ouch!

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CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

5 posted 2003-12-17 01:21 PM

Oh my goodness, this is one fantastic write PoetFriend Temptress...
A keeper in my library4meSweetie...
Smiles2u
*~coco~*

Alicat
Member Elite

since 1999-05-23

Posts 4094
Coastal Texas

6 posted 2003-12-17 05:00 PM

This is the Achilles heel in all romantics. The desire, the compulsion to encapsulate what they perceive as beauty, to revere upon a pedastal, demanding silently that, like statue, nothing change. And, invariable, something does.

Very thought provoking piece that speak to many, especially this one while younger. This poem is deserving of my signiture line.

Alicat

“It is not the strongest of the species that survive, nor the most
intelligent, but the one most responsive to change.” Charles Darwin

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

7 posted 2003-12-17 05:06 PM

her very own pedestal of gold
bejeweled with all the gems
he thought her personality matched.
sought to pull down stars
to make angels salute her
as they passed

I enjoyed your imagery and message. Like someone said, "OUCH!"

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

8 posted 2003-12-17 05:32 PM

It doesn't pay to be put on a pedestal...

It's too easy not to live up to it.

hugs
M

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

9 posted 2003-12-17 05:37 PM

"Love is love
no matter how far away
and patience is the virtue
that it thrives on."

I really liked this line a bunch.

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