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GG
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Lost in thought

0 posted 2003-11-24 01:27 AM



Undusted memories
Sit arranged for view
Aloft a stained piano.

Pictures I refuse to accept
Within my mind.

I had imagined once,
Traced love, lingered there…
But looking past  
Black and white
They turn sullen red.

On holidays,
I still refuse to hold
These memories…
For some things
Just exist,
To be left beneath it all.


- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

[This message has been edited by GG (11-24-2003 01:28 AM).]

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steavenr
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1 posted 2003-11-24 01:37 AM


The summation of your poem is superb...

"For some things
Just exist,
To be left beneath it all."

How so very true.  Nice poem.

passing shadows
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2 posted 2003-11-24 01:07 PM


always good at the endings, aren't we?
eor
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3 posted 2003-11-24 01:24 PM


"i still refuse
to hold these memories"

i really liked that line a lot, nice write.

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

Kazm
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4 posted 2003-11-24 03:20 PM


You do. You have to let them be whatever they are.

                                                 Kaz

garysgirl
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5 posted 2003-11-24 03:30 PM


On holidays,
I still refuse to hold
These memories…
For some things
Just exist,
To be left beneath it all.


Alyssa, this is a really good poem. And you
are so right....some memories are not worth remembering.....they are just too painful.
Very good writing.  
Hugs  
Ethel

Hey, I like your new picture up there!


Hockeychick19
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6 posted 2003-11-24 04:12 PM


Alyssa,

Good one... I enjoyed reading it.

~Kelly~

Life is a gift so live it to the fullest!

Brad Majors
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Georgia
7 posted 2003-11-24 04:13 PM


well donr
GG
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Lost in thought
8 posted 2003-11-25 08:05 AM


Steaven,
thanks for your reply ..I just found that to be too plain of a fact, and so hard sometimes...

Dix,
yeah... always. Makes ya wonder, doesn't it? love ya...

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.
(Blink, Breathe, Stand, Fight)

GG
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Lost in thought
9 posted 2003-11-25 08:07 AM


eor,
thanks I love knowing which lines people like most.

Kazm,
yep.. and be wherever they are.. its so easy to keep dragging them to the surface again. Thanks

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.
(Blink, Breathe, Stand, Fight)

GG
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Lost in thought
10 posted 2003-11-25 08:10 AM


Ethel,
about the pic thansk lol I thought the other one looked a little to angry so a newer, more tired look was better. And yes, they are just too painful, much too painful... thank you

Kelly,
Glad you did! Thanks much

Brad,
thanks man

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.
(Blink, Breathe, Stand, Fight)

Aimster
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11 posted 2003-11-25 09:38 AM


this is an amazing write. i see
that i need to come in here more
often, as we have many brilliant
new writers, you definitely included!

each stanza of this is powerful
enough it could stand alone as a single
poem. i especially loved the following
lines:

"had imagined once,
Traced love, lingered there…
But looking past  
Black and white
They turn sullen red."

excellent!
take care.
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

GG
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Lost in thought
12 posted 2003-11-26 09:54 PM


awww Aimster you honor me!
I'm not really too new here anymore though, but you do need to come in more, 'cause if you think I'm good then the others will amaze you lol
Im glad you liekd it, and again, thanks

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

Suetang
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13 posted 2003-11-27 09:11 PM


Hello Alyssa

Your words said so very much and were so much enjoyed.  I hope all is well in your life.

Take care........Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

GG
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Lost in thought
14 posted 2003-11-28 07:47 PM


Sue,
Thanks for the bump And for the compliments. In my life, things are as well as they get... I hope that things are well in yours, God bless you...

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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