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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2003-11-23 10:08 AM





I watch your every movement,
my backward glances expecting
a turn of eyes smiling,
as I sew my days in loose stitching
allowing the unraveling
if you should pull...
my threads.


M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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Jes
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since 2003-10-21
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Denmark
1 posted 2003-11-23 10:26 AM


Smiling eyes of love and trust.

Smile liked it

Jes


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2 posted 2003-11-23 10:59 AM


Nice.... What a perfect metaphor for it!

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Margherita
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Eternity
3 posted 2003-11-23 11:00 AM


Very nice imagery!
Love, Margherita

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
4 posted 2003-11-23 11:26 AM


Thank you Jes  *s

Ed, just a passing thought or two since I can't seem to write much else. Thank you for your kind responses.

M

Margherita, thank you for stopping by  


Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
5 posted 2003-11-23 04:53 PM


wow, this was really cool. sorry
i don't have a better adjective than
that at this time, but this was was
really a brilliant write! loved this!
take care.
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

SmartChick
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since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown
6 posted 2003-11-23 06:50 PM


This is a very nice poem. I really like it.
SimplyGold
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since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453

7 posted 2003-11-23 07:01 PM


Enjoyed this.

SG

Varuch Elohim
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since 2003-11-10
Posts 41
Italy
8 posted 2003-11-23 07:11 PM


WOW you have a great talent for using metaphors. This is perfect! Brilliant work.

Varuch

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
9 posted 2003-11-23 07:31 PM


Nicely done, Maureen.  

"When your life is tossed and turning
And you are on the raging sea I'll come and pull you from the water Then you will know that you are free" - MWS

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

10 posted 2003-12-17 01:10 PM


Oh my this is precious my dearPoetFriend...
Enjoyed it very much & shall keep this in my library...

Hugs2u
*~coco~*

[This message has been edited by CocoBaci (12-17-2003 01:11 PM).]

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
11 posted 2003-12-17 01:23 PM


coco~ I am surprised to see this one pop up again and  from the title I couldn't even remember what it was about...

Thank You. Hope you are doing well.
M

Thank you, Amy, Sue, Simply Gold,
Varuch Elohim, *s and Lone Wolf ..I appreciate your comments.

M

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