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Ericc
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0 posted 2003-11-22 10:44 AM




Everything breaks to the false grip
that holds it for a deeper sense
of love.

All that binds is meant to kill.

I have died a meaningless death to
the slight of your hands.

Killed by the mental grasp of
the image you protect.

I was more than you could ever
hope to own.

Yet I am nothing now...and still you
wish to feel me burn.

So I will be smoke to the fire that
burns to your touch.

You can have my ashes strewn to the
winds of our bitter discontent.

I will find my answers in the
breeze.

As you will find yours...in the empty
hands I leave behind.

[This message has been edited by Ericc (11-22-2003 11:09 AM).]

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Midnitesun
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1 posted 2003-11-22 10:47 AM


gulp Eric, this one left me staring silently into the blue

well written pain

jaicie114
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2 posted 2003-11-22 10:54 AM


My dear Eric...

You can always see to the center of my soul and find the words I need to say, but cannot form of my own free will. Thank you for knowing me and for singing the songs I need to hear.

Love and Light...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

cinnamongirl
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3 posted 2003-11-22 12:13 PM


Wow, baby... that is powerful and stirring... so very desperately dark, painful, yearning for release... and you have set it free; given it birth- confronted it, acknowledged it, and allowed it life.  Such a vortex of blackness that causes a soul to gravitate if it gets too close... and yet... a light shines weakly within the eye of the storm... and you are the one to harness it.  And you share it with the world.  I can feel in your words the intense pain and brillant sadness that permeates each rich and profound word.  I can taste and savor its bittersweetness.

We can choose to learn and breathe through such pain... or drown ourselves in it.

You are ever so incredibly wise of mind and soul.

You are as good lifting the spirits of conscience as you are casting light upon the shadows we are always so fearful of facing.

Without the contrast of the darkness, we fail to truly see the Light.

Haunting, heavy beauty... thank you for exorcising such darkly beautiful demons.


Thank you...

I love you,

Moca

[This message has been edited by cinnamongirl (11-22-2003 12:15 PM).]

passing shadows
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4 posted 2003-11-22 01:21 PM


this reminded me of a friend and his marriage...very sad

well done Eric

A Romantic Heart
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5 posted 2003-11-22 01:33 PM



Another passionate poem....but painful...

hope this is not from real pain at the moment,

Hugs~ARH

True poets don't write with the ink of quill or pen, but with the ink of their heart~

SharaRose
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6 posted 2003-11-22 04:57 PM


The saddest part about things like this is most people really do try their hardest to make it work. Makes you wonder why we keep searching in the face of all we go through. Love is a driving force that can't be silenced, that is for sure. It may be quieted for a while, but never slienced all together.
Love,
Terri~

[This message has been edited by SharaRose (11-22-2003 04:59 PM).]

Hockeychick19
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7 posted 2003-11-22 06:37 PM


Eric,

A lot of painful emotions here... And an excellent write.

~Kelly~

Life is a gift so live it to the fullest!

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8 posted 2003-11-22 08:23 PM


Amazing Eric...the pain in this.
Hugs~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~

ThisDiamond
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9 posted 2003-11-22 08:45 PM


Not sure how you tap my mind sometimes.
I know of someone whom I believe, believes just this...
Thanks for opening my mind.
TD

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10 posted 2003-11-22 08:50 PM


If she were smart, I would think she should rethink her decision!!!! Whew, you sure can write!

Warm hugs,
EA

mytuesdaywishes
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11 posted 2003-11-22 10:08 PM


powerful stuff, never read you before, but im glad i stopped in, see you around

joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless...

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12 posted 2003-11-22 10:20 PM


Eric, this is different from what you usually write,
but still very passionate and touching. You are an
excellent writer, my friend.
Hugs  
Ethel

Margherita
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13 posted 2003-11-23 09:09 AM


Dear Eric, as you refer here to the Buddhist wisdom, before answering your poem I read a few enlightening lines about The Second Noble Truth. Thank you for always stirring the wish to KNOW more.

In this powerful poem you seem to identify with the pain many of us often happen to cope with. By making it yours and by sharing your innermost vision you offer a way out of darkness. I think you have shown traits of the saints by doing so.

Waters running deeper and deeper ....

I love you. Margherita

Magnus
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14 posted 2003-11-23 10:19 AM


Wow,  very powerful and constructed write.
Your images convey the mood very well.

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