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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 11-21-2003 02:47 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

downward
each drop drips
gravity affected
restless
each bubble escapes
energy expended
spent

the drop and bubble
both free --
much like
butterflies and petals

like the glass that holds
moments in memory
the stem remains
wearing thorns
shedding shreds of skin

remembering
centigrades of warmth

tiny
yet sharp

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (11-21-2003 03:26 PM).]

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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 11-21-2003 02:56 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Sudhir,
Good thoughts, good write, good read.
Brad Majors
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2 posted 11-21-2003 03:29 PM       View Profile for Brad Majors   Email Brad Majors   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad Majors

beautiful
Kazm
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This is very creative. I like the way you think, your whole point of view is different but very valid.
angelblueyes
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This was great.I like the comparisons you give here.
Crystal
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5 posted 11-21-2003 05:26 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

This my friend... is one of your best in my opinion... you use imagery, metaphor, and form to deliver an abstract idea in a way that is a pleasure to read...

bravo... Bravo!
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6 posted 11-22-2003 02:31 AM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

where are you these days?

Loving this and giving it a boost

I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU!

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wonderful! just wonderful!
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Sudhir~
This is just wonderful ...~

'remembering
centigrades of warmth'


Often the tenderest moment are remembered with warmth~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
       noles1@totcon.com   

VAS
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9 posted 11-22-2003 12:03 PM       View Profile for VAS   Email VAS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for VAS

I echo Kazm, fully!

The tension of the drop as it hangs, then the release...the freedom of free-falling...yet, gravity holds on, doesn't it and the landing if it were anything but water, would surely end in calamity.

Wow, like God given freedom to rise or fall by the sun or the son.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Kahlil
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Degrees of free...tiny, yet sharp. I very much like the imagery of this.  ~K~
Pilgrimage
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11 posted 11-22-2003 11:09 PM       View Profile for Pilgrimage   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pilgrimage

I enjoyed this one, a sharp image and a painful one.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Sudhir Iyer
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12 posted 11-27-2003 04:26 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

your responses are so very appreciated... Many Many Thanks

regards
sudhir
 
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