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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 2003-11-21 02:47 PM


downward
each drop drips
gravity affected
restless
each bubble escapes
energy expended
spent

the drop and bubble
both free --
much like
butterflies and petals

like the glass that holds
moments in memory
the stem remains
wearing thorns
shedding shreds of skin

remembering
centigrades of warmth

tiny
yet sharp

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (11-21-2003 03:26 PM).]

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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2003-11-21 02:56 PM


Sudhir,
Good thoughts, good write, good read.

Brad Majors
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Georgia
2 posted 2003-11-21 03:29 PM


beautiful
Kazm
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3 posted 2003-11-21 03:46 PM


This is very creative. I like the way you think, your whole point of view is different but very valid.
angelblueyes
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4 posted 2003-11-21 03:47 PM


This was great.I like the comparisons you give here.
Crystal

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5 posted 2003-11-21 05:26 PM


This my friend... is one of your best in my opinion... you use imagery, metaphor, and form to deliver an abstract idea in a way that is a pleasure to read...

bravo... Bravo!

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6 posted 2003-11-22 02:31 AM


where are you these days?

Loving this and giving it a boost

I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU!


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7 posted 2003-11-22 03:07 AM


wonderful! just wonderful!
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8 posted 2003-11-22 09:34 AM


Sudhir~
This is just wonderful ...~

'remembering
centigrades of warmth'


Often the tenderest moment are remembered with warmth~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
       noles1@totcon.com   

VAS
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9 posted 2003-11-22 12:03 PM


I echo Kazm, fully!

The tension of the drop as it hangs, then the release...the freedom of free-falling...yet, gravity holds on, doesn't it and the landing if it were anything but water, would surely end in calamity.

Wow, like God given freedom to rise or fall by the sun or the son.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Kahlil
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10 posted 2003-11-22 10:57 PM


Degrees of free...tiny, yet sharp. I very much like the imagery of this.  ~K~
Pilgrimage
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11 posted 2003-11-22 11:09 PM


I enjoyed this one, a sharp image and a painful one.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Sudhir Iyer
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12 posted 2003-11-27 04:26 AM


your responses are so very appreciated... Many Many Thanks

regards
sudhir

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