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0 posted 2003-11-20 03:41 PM



     



Becalmed

Cordillera runs amethyst
Caliginous zephyrs over flow
Oceanic swells beckon
Moments befall seasons ago

Meerschaum to play thy feet
Sea’s green to meet thine eyes
O the rushing calls to thee
Then hails thy realize

Seagirt thou soon shalt be
This inland thou shalt forsake
As within resides the whole of thee
In the quiet Gulf's awake


~*~

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1 posted 2003-11-20 03:43 PM


A calming write that soothed my spirit.


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2 posted 2003-11-20 05:22 PM



~Smiling at you...and longing to 'drift'.~

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3 posted 2003-11-20 05:31 PM


I think I will go walking the beach at sunrise now
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4 posted 2003-11-20 06:54 PM


Methinks perhaps our Sunshine calls my hand from over in the Alley, makes good use of the familiar....work those pronouns, Sunny One!

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5 posted 2003-11-20 08:24 PM


Beautiful lines,  the flow of the last two
stanzas is perfect...nice one KJ...

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6 posted 2003-11-20 11:15 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, I just love the imagery and allusion crystallizing these precious words of yours, sweet friend, God Bless You, every sunrise has its own story to tell other than the others, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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7 posted 2003-11-20 11:28 PM


Beautiful poem, though I must admit I had to go to Bartleby's no fewer than three times for definitions. Thank you for the exercise of expansion...of my mind, that is.
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