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September Morning (Tanka)
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September Morning (Tanka) |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Silver gray, soft roof A shroud that clings wets the ground Strings diamonds on silk. Goldenrod webbed to asters, The midnight work of spiders. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Nightshade, Chris If you read this you will see that I have stuck to the rules of the form this time... ______ice ><> |
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allamericanjoe Member
since 2003-10-02
Posts 116Iredell county, NC |
Nice write! Very visual, well done. You drew a picture in my mind  "The secret of life is enjoying the passage of time" ~James taylor~ |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is a very beautiful write. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderful! I love these! |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Very interesting ''brain images''...i like spiders webs dripping with dew... |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hi ice...love this. Glad to see you posting something for me to read. You know I always enjoy your words my friend! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ice, Some paintings you just stand before and look at.  |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
beautifully written. you do these well, my friend. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Good job, Ice. Some people pronounce di-e-mond; others dim-end, so it works for you in this instance. Great job on imagery! |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Stuck to the rules and beautifully so. This is excellent. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Better than the last one, I especially loved the line "Strings diamonds on silk" Such lovely imagery. Will be watching for your next one. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oooh, this is wonderful ice. Well done! I love this "shorties" hee hee. Chris Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I can see every detail as I close my eyes ~ and I can feel the dampness of a cool September morning. Lovely write. Warm hugs, EA |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Thank you poet friends...:-) For responding to this Tanka and for all the nice comments... I look at each response with respect and love. My time in my work season is very limited, so it is difficult for me to reply quickly and individually, but please know that this general thanks does not take away from the particular joy of each reply... Winter is coming and I will have more time to concentrate on better replies to replies... Again, thank you all... ___________ice ><> |
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