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A light breeze.

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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow


0 posted 11-19-2003 03:24 PM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Kaoru

Today,
the backdrop of the world
is warmer than
the
palm of our hands
combined.

Lest
we let
that keep us
from
shivering,

being held
makes me
feel
like there's a damn good reason
to be cold.
© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 11-19-2003 03:29 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

being held
makes me
feel
like there's a damn good reason
to be cold.

~*~

I know some people who are going to hold on to this one very tight!
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2 posted 11-19-2003 03:38 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

Today,
the backdrop of the world
is warmer than
the
palm of our hands
combined.


these lines set well the form, by creating an image that draws the reader in, the following lines, then the ending, all deliver the punch, the part that takes your breath for a second, in understanding and in empathy...

you dear do truly impress me... you write well beyond your years in understanding and have the talent to deliver the words in such a way they become a part of the reader...

I'll be proud to say one day... "I read her before..I read her when.."

Joe Houck
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3 posted 11-19-2003 03:58 PM       View Profile for Joe Houck   Email Joe Houck   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Joe Houck

very nice...=)

Joe
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4 posted 11-19-2003 04:36 PM       View Profile for wintertao   Email wintertao   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wintertao

I like this Alot
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5 posted 11-19-2003 04:36 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

enjoyed
passing shadows
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excellent!
Brad Majors
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7 posted 11-21-2003 07:44 AM       View Profile for Brad Majors   Email Brad Majors   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad Majors

well written
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8 posted 11-21-2003 07:46 AM       View Profile for inkedgoddess   Email inkedgoddess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for inkedgoddess

yes this is good in few words, manaaging to get the idea across and draw in the read
Seymour Tabin
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Kaoru
Good thoughts, good write, good read.
Kahlil
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very nice!  ~K~
LeeJ
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your words are a seer and guide, and need to be published for all to rein in the wealth of your mind.  Astounding write...took me right in and held me very closely.  
eor
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12 posted 11-21-2003 01:03 PM       View Profile for eor   Email eor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for eor

there is a reason...loved this! adding for sure...

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

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Meghan~
You are quite a remarkable writer young lady~
Wonderful read`
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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really nice...James
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I'm going to have to disagree with those above.
You miss me with this one.  I don't see it.

-glider-
Kaoru
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16 posted 11-22-2003 01:12 AM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

That COULD be a problem, Glider. But there's no way I could possibly explain. My apologies.
Dee
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Another stunning piece. I agree, a remarkable talent you have. I am looking forward to watching it grow with you. (The mind boggles as to how it will grow )

Dee

Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are.        Clearwater

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I love the ending to this lovely poem! I'm with you! ~ Being held is one hellova good reason for getting cold!


EA
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19 posted 11-22-2003 09:05 PM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

ahhh yea! I love it...
Makes me cold... but it makes me love it.. in some twisted  warm way.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

mytuesdaywishes
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20 posted 11-22-2003 09:55 PM       View Profile for mytuesdaywishes   Email mytuesdaywishes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mytuesdaywishes

i know exactly what you mean....i like this one alot

joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless...

mytuesdaywishes
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21 posted 12-14-2003 07:34 PM       View Profile for mytuesdaywishes   Email mytuesdaywishes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mytuesdaywishes

haha, tremendous

joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless...

 
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