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LeeJ
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0 posted 2003-11-19 11:38 AM


Night tranquil behind God’s eyes
Where our hearts reside
Within so engaging a table
Arranging diamond plates
An exquisite collection
Exploring truth and beauty
In happy hours before my eyes
Answering a ready look
Lending fair hues…encouragement
I am weak without you
Nuzzling the corners of evening
Soothing overwhelming tea
They say fear is from loneliness…
I am unsure…though you are critical in my life
Love presents two sides, physical and spiritual
Where union takes pride
Like a night cap, you embrace my mind
Warmth,  light forms, tempered, you man of music
Formulated assertions, oh, how could I ignore?
Forget such moments…we wept and prayed
Blank verses spent into time complete
Listening to silent seas and they’re endless cavities
Of silkweed wreaths, you’ve attempted and succeeded
I am hopelessly in love for all time, seasons
Improving such a fanciful notion, carried on the
Winds of instance…to you and all lovers of the world
Sentiments like the kiss of roses
Sparkle from your eyes, my jewels of fresh themes
Repeatedly accent and embracing prose romantic
I am lost within you


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Ericc
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1 posted 2003-11-19 11:51 AM


Beautiful.

Eric

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2 posted 2003-11-19 02:21 PM


They say fear is from loneliness…
I am unsure…though you are critical in my life
Love presents two sides, physical and spiritual
Where union takes pride


you could write the subject fo these two lines forever.. so broad and wide is the possibilities, yet you weave them into a small part of the whole and let the reader draw them out for themselves...


enjoyed

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3 posted 2003-11-19 03:06 PM


I am hopelessly in love for all time, seasons
Improving such a fanciful notion, carried on the
Winds of instance…to you and all lovers of the world
Sentiments like the kiss of roses
Sparkle from your eyes, my jewels of fresh themes
Repeatedly accent and embracing prose romantic
I am lost within you

Wonderful Lee..just amazing. Chris

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4 posted 2003-11-19 03:08 PM


wonderful
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where the wild flowers grow
5 posted 2003-11-19 03:10 PM


Speechless...
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