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Greeneyes
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0 posted 11-19-2003 10:08 AM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Greeneyes

{And the wind speaks}


I know you hear the lonely sighs of night
ageless; casting shadows from the moon

I listened, always listened hoping to know,
           learn more of wisdom you might offer
from broken tree tops
on the edge of air--
sweeping the stars  to capture again
jewels lost from heaven
          emeralds from earths treasure
given as soft offering
and unknown depths of eyes
          seeking to feel  anything again…

still,  daylight finds me
reaching for traces
of each chamber       touched from
your fingers     -music awakes my
escape    in gentle tears
....

Would he see?    I wonder if he noticed
     the glass  caught in sunlight;

In a reflection
     you lifted me--
                     held me--


My palms touched   with feeling; the
   canvas

When the world is quiet
  I hear you      bending tones
among angels   where all words
   of hope lie

A sanctuary:


Shoulders,  shrouded  
in veils of white        laced  in forms of
fragile   breaths  inhaling   rain,
   exhaling darkness  
releasing    the spirit:

I have lived
inside your vision
   uncoiling all threads --

watching light slip,      sink
      among trees
weaving through  fog
settling slowly into the sifts
   of earth
....
Midnight will find me  once again
haunting    the rain    for one touch    
            of your soaked lips
a memory of  dreams that still ache

come closer so that my heart may be still
this dance before me

~~**~~
{Greatly inspired, and muse dedicated}


~~**~~



I had a dream last night
you came to me on silver wings of light
I flew away with you in painted sky
Was it real
Is it what you see,touch or feel



[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (11-19-2003 05:51 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 11-19-2003 10:16 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

My friend, you always amaze me with your talent to weave words into something more.

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2 posted 11-19-2003 10:56 AM       View Profile for EvocativeVerse2   Email EvocativeVerse2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for EvocativeVerse2

This is like...wow! I love it. An amazing piece of work. Bravo!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

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very nice
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Listening to every heart


4 posted 11-19-2003 11:10 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Greatly inspired is right...
tell whomever did so,
thank you.
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just out of reach


5 posted 11-19-2003 11:10 AM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

This is simply awesome! Love it! Chris

Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore



    

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Beautifully written, sensational as a matter of factly....very very pretty write
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7 posted 11-19-2003 11:26 AM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Breathtaking Lauren...you have an amazing talent.
Hugs~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~

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Oh wow...!!!!

Eric
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"watching light slip,      sink
      among trees
weaving through  fog
settling slowly into the sifts
   of earth"

Such an elegant picture.  Loved this visualization.
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every line

I must keep this for another read

and another
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I can not say anything more but what I always say...
your words are so delicate dear friend,
your gift, so precious.   sister
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12 posted 11-19-2003 01:29 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I know you hear the lonely sighs of night
ageless; casting shadows from the moon

I listened, always listened hoping to know,
           learn more of wisdom you might offer
from broken tree tops
on the edge of air--
sweeping the stars  to capture again
jewels lost from heaven
          emeralds from earths treasure
given as soft offering
and unknown depths of eyes
          seeking to feel  anything again…

still,  daylight finds me
reaching for traces
of each chamber       touched from
your fingers     -music awakes my
escape    in gentle tears

  
===============

Shoulders,  shrouded  
in veils of white        laced  in forms of
fragile   breaths  inhaling   rain,
   exhaling darkness  
releasing    the spirit:

I have lived
inside your vision
   uncoiling all threads --

watching light slip,      sink
      among trees
weaving through  fog
settling slowly into the sifts
   of earth


....


Midnight will find me  once again
haunting    the rain    for one touch    
            of your soaked lips
a memory of  dreams that still ache

come closer so that my heart may be still
this dance before me

=================================

My God Lauren...this write takes my breath away...every single word is a diamond, the lines are gold strand weaving them all into these stunning verses....

time and time again you write my heart's whispers....

I listened, always listened hoping to know,
           learn more of wisdom you might offer
from broken tree tops
on the edge of air--
sweeping the stars  to capture again
jewels lost from heaven
          emeralds from earths treasure
given as soft offering
and unknown depths of eyes
          seeking to feel  anything again…



no one-- NO one else writes quite like this... you are so amazingly talented.
~~**~~
{Greatly inspired, and muse dedicated}

~~~~~~~~~~

Yes Lord... yesssssssssssss

When I'm with you my eyes are so wide ...
you reached right in my head and turned on the light inside
turned on the light in my mind.

David Gray

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(smiles) Oh Lauren, your poetry is always a treasure to behold, sweet friend, God Bless You and i hope you dance forever after even through the darkest shades of midnight, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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I thank each of you with much love...
My muse walks these blue pages sometimes and tugs my heart....reminding me of beauty and life....Again thank you


and
Lauren~

~~**~~

I had a dream last night
you came to me on silver wings of light
I flew away with you in painted sky
Was it real
Is it what you see,touch or feel

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15 posted 11-20-2003 01:31 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

For what its worth Lauren, I was so deeply touched by this poem, that I have read it a few times.  I think inasmuch as you always have the right words woven into your silk, it seems to me to be sequence in which your poem enfolds that gets to me mostly.  I hardly had time to catch my breath with this piece for fear I might miss one word.  

Try to make time to listen to
someone when they speak from their heart.

Carpe' Diem

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16 posted 11-20-2003 09:52 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

"Midnight will find me  once again
haunting    the rain    for one touch    
            of your soaked lips
a memory of  dreams that still ache


come closer so that my heart may be still
this dance before me"


ahhhhhha.....WOW.....Lauren, this is pure perfection...I love this one, every word, but the ones above mostly...gonna keep this one for sure!
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Greeneyes
Simply lovely, A breath of loves air.
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"Midnight will find me  once again
haunting    the rain    for one touch    
            of your soaked lips
a memory of  dreams that still ache"

This leaves me speechless...but I am saving...

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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Lauren, this ache is so haunting...I feel as if I know this and you because of a particular piece of your work that has still to leave me since I read of it last week.  

Your emotions are so clear in your images.  A wonderful write, my friend.

Patricia
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simply...complexly, beautiful!

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Again Greeneyes convenes her class: "Mastery Of Verse"

I'll sit as close to the blackboard as decorum will allow.

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Would he see?    I wonder if he noticed
     the glass  caught in sunlight;

In a reflection
     you lifted me--
                     held me--
I think he might just do that...who could
miss that beauty?
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This poem is a thing of beauty and was a delight to read. Wow!

What a lucky muse you have!

Have a great day, Lauren.

"If this grand panorama before me is what you call God...then God is not dead."

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Though my soul may sit in darkness,
It will arise in perfect light.
I have loved the stars too fondly
To be fearful of the night".




  
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