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The Edge of Air
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The Edge of Air |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{And the wind speaks} I know you hear the lonely sighs of night ageless; casting shadows from the moon I listened, always listened hoping to know, learn more of wisdom you might offer from broken tree tops on the edge of air-- sweeping the stars to capture again jewels lost from heaven emeralds from earths treasure given as soft offering and unknown depths of eyes seeking to feel anything again… still, daylight finds me reaching for traces of each chamber touched from your fingers -music awakes my escape in gentle tears .... Would he see? I wonder if he noticed the glass caught in sunlight; In a reflection you lifted me-- held me-- My palms touched with feeling; the canvas When the world is quiet I hear you bending tones among angels where all words of hope lie A sanctuary: Shoulders, shrouded in veils of white laced in forms of fragile breaths inhaling rain, exhaling darkness releasing the spirit: I have lived inside your vision uncoiling all threads -- watching light slip, sink among trees weaving through fog settling slowly into the sifts of earth .... Midnight will find me once again haunting the rain for one touch of your soaked lips a memory of dreams that still ache come closer so that my heart may be still this dance before me ~~**~~ {Greatly inspired, and muse dedicated} ~~**~~ I had a dream last night you came to me on silver wings of light I flew away with you in painted sky Was it real Is it what you see,touch or feel [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (11-19-2003 05:51 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
My friend, you always amaze me with your talent to weave words into something more. |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
This is like...wow! I love it. An amazing piece of work. Bravo! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
very nice  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Greatly inspired is right... tell whomever did so, thank you. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is simply awesome! Love it! Chris  Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Beautifully written, sensational as a matter of factly....very very pretty write |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Breathtaking Lauren...you have an amazing talent. Hugs~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~ |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Oh wow...!!!! Eric |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"watching light slip, sink among trees weaving through fog settling slowly into the sifts of earth" Such an elegant picture. Loved this visualization. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
every line I must keep this for another read and another |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I can not say anything more but what I always say... your words are so delicate dear friend, your gift, so precious.   sister |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I know you hear the lonely sighs of night ageless; casting shadows from the moon I listened, always listened hoping to know, learn more of wisdom you might offer from broken tree tops on the edge of air-- sweeping the stars to capture again jewels lost from heaven emeralds from earths treasure given as soft offering and unknown depths of eyes seeking to feel anything again… still, daylight finds me reaching for traces of each chamber touched from your fingers -music awakes my escape in gentle tears =============== Shoulders, shrouded in veils of white laced in forms of fragile breaths inhaling rain, exhaling darkness releasing the spirit: I have lived inside your vision uncoiling all threads -- watching light slip, sink among trees weaving through fog settling slowly into the sifts of earth .... Midnight will find me once again haunting the rain for one touch of your soaked lips a memory of dreams that still ache come closer so that my heart may be still this dance before me ================================= My God Lauren...this write takes my breath away...every single word is a diamond, the lines are gold strand weaving them all into these stunning verses.... time and time again you write my heart's whispers.... I listened, always listened hoping to know, learn more of wisdom you might offer from broken tree tops on the edge of air-- sweeping the stars to capture again jewels lost from heaven emeralds from earths treasure given as soft offering and unknown depths of eyes seeking to feel anything again… no one-- NO one else writes quite like this... you are so amazingly talented. ~~**~~ {Greatly inspired, and muse dedicated} ~~~~~~~~~~ Yes Lord... yesssssssssssss When I'm with you my eyes are so wide ... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Lauren, your poetry is always a treasure to behold, sweet friend, God Bless You and i hope you dance forever after even through the darkest shades of midnight, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I thank each of you with much love... My muse walks these blue pages sometimes and tugs my heart....reminding me of beauty and life....Again thank you and Lauren~ ~~**~~ I had a dream last night |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
For what its worth Lauren, I was so deeply touched by this poem, that I have read it a few times. I think inasmuch as you always have the right words woven into your silk, it seems to me to be sequence in which your poem enfolds that gets to me mostly. I hardly had time to catch my breath with this piece for fear I might miss one word. Try to make time to listen to |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Midnight will find me once again haunting the rain for one touch of your soaked lips a memory of dreams that still ache come closer so that my heart may be still this dance before me" ahhhhhha.....WOW.....Lauren, this is pure perfection...I love this one, every word, but the ones above mostly...gonna keep this one for sure! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Greeneyes Simply lovely, A breath of loves air. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Midnight will find me once again haunting the rain for one touch of your soaked lips a memory of dreams that still ache" This leaves me speechless...but I am saving... "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Lauren, this ache is so haunting...I feel as if I know this and you because of a particular piece of your work that has still to leave me since I read of it last week. Your emotions are so clear in your images. A wonderful write, my friend. Patricia |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
simply...complexly, beautiful! Rf |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Again Greeneyes convenes her class: "Mastery Of Verse" I'll sit as close to the blackboard as decorum will allow. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Would he see? I wonder if he noticed the glass caught in sunlight; In a reflection you lifted me-- held me-- I think he might just do that...who could miss that beauty? |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
This poem is a thing of beauty and was a delight to read. Wow! What a lucky muse you have! Have a great day, Lauren. "If this grand panorama before me is what you call God...then God is not dead." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Though my soul may sit in darkness, It will arise in perfect light. I have loved the stars too fondly To be fearful of the night".  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
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