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Brad Majors
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0 posted 2003-11-18 03:10 PM



Spinning backwards
Catching pieces
Of you
Falling through space

Wishing for rewind
Finding only
Nightmare
Of fast forward

I love you
Now so trite
Watching you
come apart

Hiding in the corner
Humpty Dumpty
Falls off the wall
And the King's men
Are all stoned

I want your pain
I scream
Echoing off
The hollow remnant
Of a wild child
That made love
In Central Park
With full audience

Trying to catch pieces
Of you
I fall apart
Sitting in your dark corner
Flying through space


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Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2003-11-18 03:15 PM


"Hiding in the corner
Humpty Dumpty
Falls off the wall
And the King's men
Are all stoned"

Seems to be the story of my life sometimes....Loved that!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

Brad Majors
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2 posted 2003-11-18 03:31 PM


thank you
littlewing
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3 posted 2003-11-18 07:29 PM


Good God in Heaven Brad I have no
clue how you do this . . . but
please dont stop
amazing God amazing lines
feel as if I have tipped off of
a wall
myself
*smile*
xxoo

Kahlil
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4 posted 2003-11-18 08:32 PM


Wow, this is an incredible write!  I know this experience all too well.  Keeping this one. ~K~
Magic Solias
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5 posted 2003-11-18 08:39 PM


Great piece.  Always like them like that.  A keeper.
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6 posted 2003-11-18 11:31 PM


nicely done
passing shadows
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7 posted 2003-11-19 04:44 AM


'click' into the library
Brad Majors
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8 posted 2003-11-19 07:52 AM


thank you
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9 posted 2003-11-19 02:58 PM


Brad~

'Trying to catch pieces
Of you
I fall apart'


I feel this~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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