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0 posted 2003-11-18 12:35 PM




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Candle
Coloured wax light
Wick of flickering flame
Casting shadows upon night's wall
Lover's silent dining companion
Symbol of life and constant hope
Perched upon birthday cakes
Snuffed by a wish ~
Candle


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Chris Barker
November 2003
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1 posted 2003-11-18 12:39 PM


you must be one of the more talented poets around here, aren't you
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2 posted 2003-11-18 12:42 PM


yes she is
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3 posted 2003-11-18 12:42 PM


well written
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4 posted 2003-11-18 12:44 PM


Wow!!! What a lovely read.  What symmetry and imagery!  Thank you for this lovely creation.
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5 posted 2003-11-18 01:10 PM


yes! very nice!
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6 posted 2003-11-18 01:16 PM


"snuffed by a wish"
- a line worth stealing -

-glider-

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7 posted 2003-11-18 01:22 PM


Wow! Thankyou all so much. I didn't expect many readers of this one.
Oh, and C?.....no I am not - but thankyou.

Helen..

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8 posted 2003-11-18 01:35 PM


Chris, your rictameter was lovely and illuminous!

Loving hugs,
Linda

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9 posted 2003-11-18 01:35 PM


Oh my goodness, Chris!!!
This is so beautiful!!
Thanks for sharing it with us.  
Hugs, my friend  
Ethel

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10 posted 2003-11-18 01:43 PM


Very nicely done Chris!
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11 posted 2003-11-18 01:51 PM


Linda, Ethel and NancyLee, thankyou lady poets three!! hugs!
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12 posted 2003-11-18 01:54 PM


and chris...

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13 posted 2003-11-18 03:43 PM


Perfect. They don't come better than this!

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14 posted 2003-11-18 03:47 PM



You're beaming, little one.  This is one that could be framed.

It is THAT beautiful.

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15 posted 2003-11-18 04:02 PM


Ratleader & Sunshine - thankyou both for taking the time to read and comment. hugs!!
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16 posted 2003-11-18 06:16 PM


Sooo much said here Chris in only a few lines . . .  

I felt three different phases of life:

Casting shadows upon night's wall
Lover's silent dining companion
Symbol of life and constant hope

beautiful
xxoo

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17 posted 2003-11-18 06:57 PM


enjoyed
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18 posted 2003-11-18 07:07 PM


Thankyou Sue and vandana! hugs!

Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore



    

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19 posted 2003-11-19 01:54 AM


wonderful piece..."snuffed by a wish" is quite a powerful line, had never thought of it that way, very creative.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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20 posted 2003-11-19 09:07 AM



Oops...missed my library button...

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21 posted 2003-11-19 12:18 PM


Poem and picture... what a lovely presentation! *S* Beautiful work, lady! *S*
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22 posted 2003-11-19 06:10 PM


Hi there Chris. You do these rictameters so well.
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23 posted 2003-11-19 07:18 PM


Hi Chris ... I love this. So much offered in such a few lines.

You 'are' one of the most talented and gifted writers around here!  Congrats!

Huggles and luvs, Marti

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24 posted 2003-11-19 08:00 PM


Thankyou all so much!

Marti.....

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25 posted 2003-11-24 04:52 PM


Nice...candles can set a very romantic mood...as you get older you don't like to see so many candles on top the birthday cake...I let one candle represent ten years...James
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