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0 posted 2003-11-17 07:40 PM



Erosion

It would be grand to say “canyon,”
but there is no canyon,
no blearing expanse
of time, of mountains, cliffs,
only a work of little voids
without respite or cataclysm.

It is drop by teardrop,
flake by mote like a dulling knife
with each loss miniscule, just
a bit of love, a grain of joy
but always with a lot left
to resist this strange
and out of season rain.

© Copyright 2003 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-11-17 08:45 PM


I don't think I've ever had the pleasure of being the first to respond to one of your poems... what a treat! *S*

We do tend to be mesmerized by the magnificent... while being defined by small moments of significance. *S* I like this very much, my friend... excellent! *S*

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2 posted 2003-11-17 10:19 PM


Ed~
Tee-Hee @ Suthern ... if she's impressed ... make that two~
I would probably had said the same thing if I'd have been first ... well, not that I was thrilled or anything ... but you know ... that gushy stuff she said about the poem itself~

Oh heck ... I like it !!!
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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3 posted 2003-11-18 11:36 AM


ROFL @ Marge... I do NOT gush! LOL

I do, however, like this... very much. *S*

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4 posted 2003-11-19 04:50 AM


Ratleader,
   Thanks for pointing this out to me.  I read it once, twice, and had to go for a third time.   Your writing is brilliant.   I liked very much how you took the grand out of canyon, carving it with tears (the Colorado River might be a little jealous, though, as not to receive a little credit, but that's how it goes!)  Thanks for your comments at my post and directing this to me.
                            Sadelite

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5 posted 2003-11-19 07:57 AM


well done
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6 posted 2003-11-19 08:04 AM


wonderful writing, again and again and again...you are a master at all feelings and expressing them...
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7 posted 2003-12-07 04:59 PM


Ed...I'm just getting around to reading some of the poems I missed while I was gone.  Erosion doesn't have to be magnificent to have an impact.

[This message has been edited by Martie (12-07-2003 07:01 PM).]

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