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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2003-11-17 08:59 AM

Challenged

I've felt the wind of matter much,
its course a bit off track.
I've seen it, words in front of eyes
before the night turns back.

I've peddled it in rhymes of need
that masquerade the real.
I've felt the wind of matter much
in nakedness appeal.

I've often wondered why it is
at times and why it's not,
that breezes tend to fade the please
when silence is forgot.

I'm challenged many moments in
but does it matter much,
when all there is, is stolen time
of once upon a touch.

I've done the dance, a time or two
now pages edged in brown.
The looking glass across from me
is watching tears run down.

Untitled, this day verses me
in thoughtful aging pose
while I, can see the newness of
the turning of a rose.

Challenged me to single out,
to vase it to be eyed.
And therein is the promise of
the matter much, disguised.
M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

1 posted 2003-11-17 10:40 AM

Darn! I love this and what the heck is it doing on page 2? Back to the top of the list this goes. This is absolutely marvelous and just made my #1 must read poem of the day list! That is an exclusive club nakdthoughts...and you should really be proud of this piece...for it deserves some attention.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2003-11-17 10:53 AM

Thank you EV2..but it was just a "slip" of rhyming words...wondering how much it does matter

M

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2003-11-17 11:00 AM

M,

I couldn't pick a favorite line, they were all so full of thought and meaning...

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2003-11-17 11:04 AM

"I've peddled it in rhymes of need
that masquerade the real.
I've felt the wind of matter much
in nakedness appeal."

~ and you peddle all your rhymes with honest and naked appeal!!!

Warm hugs on a cold November day,
EA

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2003-11-17 11:56 AM

SweetFriend~

'I'm challenged many moments in
but does it matter much,
when all there is, is stolen time
of once upon a touch.

I've done the dance, a time or two
now pages edged in brown.
The looking glass across from me
is watching tears run down.'

I see me in your looking glass today~
God, I hope it matters much~

This is beautiful~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
noles1@totcon.com

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