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gemjop
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0 posted 2003-11-16 02:32 PM




The loose unwrap

  of dream
     came fallen those hours ago
       lack lustre midnight
         half way between one

To shiver in the shrill alarm
  of waking
though from nightmare
  is liberatingly obscene


Bones shook

   for all that I could not weep
       finding ghosts do not long
           for human touch
              but foolish I for theirs



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Jes
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1 posted 2003-11-16 02:40 PM


To mee it sound like a scary feeling or someone that gets you near the bones. But im not sure a few of the words i didnt understand.

smile

Jes

But thanks for the read, i will look those words up.


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2 posted 2003-11-16 02:45 PM


for all that I could not weep
       finding ghosts do not long
           for human touch
              but foolish I for theirs


Hi Gemma-girl. It's good to see you here.
I've missed you, too!! I enjoyed reading your poem.
Hugs and love, my friend  
Ethel


Snowflake From Hell
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3 posted 2003-11-16 02:56 PM


well, im at a loss for words i really enjoyed reading this

We do away with your kind...I am war I am pain I am all you've ever slein I am tears in your eyes I am truth I am lies.   Dimmu Borgir

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4 posted 2003-11-16 03:45 PM


"for all that I could not weep
       finding ghosts do not long
           for human touch
              but foolish I for theirs"

~ Oh, gemma, you little darlin'. I wanna give you a big, warm embrace and comfort you.

Loving hugs,
Linda
P.S. I've been missing you, gem drop!

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5 posted 2003-11-16 04:36 PM


Keeperkeeperkeeperkeeper!!!

What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall?
All walls are great, if the roof doesn't fall.
-yorke/bjork

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6 posted 2003-11-16 08:46 PM



       lack lustre midnight
         half way between one

To shiver in the shrill alarm
  of waking
============================

   for all that I could not weep
       finding ghosts do not long
           for human touch
              but foolish I for theirs

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Have I ever told you I would kill for you muse....
good grief I love the way you write.

Words break into splinters on the pages I write
If I lost you I don't know what I'd do ...
Burn forever where the flame turns blue

David Gray

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just out of reach
7 posted 2003-11-16 09:07 PM


Gave me chills. Perfect. Keepin' it! Chris

Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore



    

serenity blaze
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8 posted 2003-11-16 10:52 PM


I happen to be listening to Norah Jones now, and I love this particular verse, coupled with your poem:

"I need no soft lights to enchant me
if you'd only grant me
the right
to hold you ever so tight
and to feel in the night...the nearness of you..."

Hugs gemma.


and yes, he says this is me:

"crooked little smile on her face
tells a tale of love that's all her own..."

spinning laughing dancing to her favorite song--she's a little girl with nothing wrong and she's all alone.

damn gemma. Thank you.


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9 posted 2003-11-17 05:11 AM


chilling but cool! very cool!
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