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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2003-11-15 10:10 PM




I kept my fingers crossed
holding out hope
that you might spare me  
knowing that you never would
understanding why you never could
after all my mudslinging
it's pay back time
and now I know.
There is no meeting half way
or happy medium in between
all that's left is hurt feelings
and for that I am truly sorry
for I know as sure as the sun will rise
it will not shine for you and I.
Your heart is a kind and gentle one
sadly mine was in the wrong place
long before our time
if there ever was~


© Copyright 2003 BluesSerenade - All Rights Reserved
Magic Solias
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1 posted 2003-11-15 10:17 PM


Difficult to be that honest, to see so clear.

Magic Solias

"we dream to love and love to dream"

Magnus
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2 posted 2003-11-15 10:32 PM


A true champion is one who accepts defeat
gracefully....and raises their hand when
asked if they were wrong....

You are a champion....

PouringJewels
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since 2003-09-18
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3 posted 2003-11-15 10:59 PM


His loss my friend. By now you probably know this to be true. I just wrote a terrible feeling I have, called "Wrong I may be" Sounds like we have something on our minds.
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Member Rara Avis
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In Your Poetic Mind
4 posted 2003-11-15 11:04 PM


Hugsss sweet lady....I admire how you speak truth in every word you write.....peace to your mind and heart.....
lauren~

i carry your heart with me
i am never without it
you are what a moon has always meant sky of sky
the wonder that keeps stars apart-
e.e.cummings

inkedgoddess
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Ohio
5 posted 2003-11-15 11:05 PM


no no
one swift kick, first,,,,,
a little bit of street justice from a streetgirl
then let him go.................

passing shadows
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displaced
6 posted 2003-11-16 02:22 AM


damn

you know I know

She
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Wishing On A Northern Star
7 posted 2003-11-16 02:41 AM


minus the mudslinging part, I know someone I could send this to. I hate breaking hearts...but it happens when I don't want it to.

"You put a stain on all of my good days."
Matchbox Twenty "Disease"

GG
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
8 posted 2003-11-16 03:38 AM


hard truth, but you wrote of it well.
Well done...

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Duncan
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9 posted 2003-11-16 09:16 AM


"all that's left is hurt feelings
and for that I am truly sorry"

Ditto...   

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
10 posted 2003-11-16 09:18 AM


BluesSerenade
A very gentle let down. Well done.

Sparticus
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11 posted 2003-11-16 09:28 AM


Well done with a lot of feeling.

Even with insects-
some can sing
some can't

-Issa

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
12 posted 2003-11-16 09:45 AM


still blue, I see...

a walk along the beach??? I will join you in thought


M

icebox
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in the shadows
13 posted 2003-11-16 12:58 PM


Sad.

Words are like bullets,
once loosed no power in the universe can recall them.

You don't need me to tell you that you are a good person, but I will anyway.  You are a good person.  


Jes
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since 2003-10-21
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Denmark
14 posted 2003-11-16 02:11 PM



"""
Your heart is a kind and gentle one
sadly mine was in the wrong place
long before our time
if there ever was~
"""

This is the only part i dont want to say its true, some of it yes but not that you dont have a heart smile you are the one taht has it with these words of truth.

I trust your big heart, just out of your words.

Smile thumb up for you.

jes

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
15 posted 2003-11-16 04:57 PM


Thank you all for reading this, and more importantly
for allowing me to make my peace and find it here.
It's like a long good-bye that has come to an end,
and at this point, it is all that I had hoped for.

Thank you again, for letting me be,
in spite of all my shades of blue~

Warm hugs all around you~  

Mistletoe Angel
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16 posted 2003-11-16 06:28 PM




(sigh) This is very heartfelt, sweet friend, perhaps it's not your time but just follow your heart and let the payback be made on achieving your destiny and coming up strong! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Ratleader
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17 posted 2003-11-21 02:44 PM


Oh...I missed this....


...and I miss you.

Don't be gone too long, eh?

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Robert Frazier
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18 posted 2003-11-21 02:51 PM


sad...
Courageous.

Rf

Sudhir Iyer
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19 posted 2003-11-21 04:02 PM


reading this, I can only but concur... there was...

hugs to you dear friend... tight hugs... I know of the loss you speak/write of...

regards
sudhir

SimplyGold
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20 posted 2003-11-21 05:03 PM


BluesSerenade,

This poem shows such humility. To understand and take responsiblity for such insight is awesome! You are on an upward plane, a higher level than most. Thanks for your sharing and raising the bar..
SG

vandana
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21 posted 2003-11-21 06:52 PM


loved this one
Chrissysue
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Nebraska
22 posted 2003-11-21 06:58 PM


Thank you for sharing such a heartfelt poem.  I can identify with it .. especially now in my life.  Some very well turned phrases as well..
Ratleader
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23 posted 2003-11-22 11:29 PM


Where the heck are you, Blues??? I miss you!

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Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
24 posted 2003-11-22 11:36 PM



I know that it may be difficult at times, but each of us must first be true Blue to ourself... and that is what you appear to be doing. A gentle write from a gentle soul.


Linda

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
25 posted 2003-11-23 12:40 PM


I am wondering too..where you have gone...

hugss
M

Aimster
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Charlotte, NC
26 posted 2003-11-23 05:06 PM


lori,

your writing always touches me deep within...for your words are always
so honest and truthful, even at times
like this, painfully so. but i respect
and admire you more than you know, both
not only as a poetress but as a person!
this took true courage.
take care,
amy

p.s. drop me a e-mail if you want
to talk or anything.

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

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