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Diamante of Leaves
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Diamante of Leaves |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Greens Fresh, Moist Reviving, Nourishing, Extending Tree, Life, Ground, Death Dreading, Decaying, Expending Dusty, Gritty Browns [This message has been edited by Sadelite (11-18-2003 02:52 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
ahhh yes...the fall of the leaves pretty though for a bit before they become so gritty although I mowed mine down making them disintegrate faster *s M |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
very nice  ) |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
nakdthoughts, Thanks for your comments. Yes, I think they're pretty, too, but the colors don't last nearly long enough! One of my best memories is of jumping in a pile of leaves with my friends that was about 15 feet tall, scattered next to a hill waiting for the city to remove them. The next day the city put up a sign, "Don't jump in the leaves!" Well, it was fun while it lasted! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
wintertao, Thanks for reading and commenting. Have a nice day. Sadelite |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I have a picture of me covered in leaves from about 2 falls ago...it IS fun jumping in them...  M |
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C? Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 190 |
I'm sure if I understand the from...if you have read my stuff, you'd know I'm no trained poet...good words though, interesting for me none the less! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
C?, Iknow what you mean. I'm not trained, but I am picking up a little bit from friends and a book I ran across the other day. Here are the guidelines for Diamante. This was my first one--they're lots of fun to try. 1 word 2 adjectives for word in line 1 3 participles for word in line 1 4 nouns-2 related to line 1, 2 related to #7 3 participles for word in line 7 2 adjectives for word in line 7 1 word (that is the opposite to the first word you wrote.) Enjoy, Sadelite |
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C? Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 190 |
ah ha. and now the form makes sense very nice |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 Excellent! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Economical use of words ~ yet very effective! And thank you for the guidelines that you gave in one of your replies!  Warm hugs & smiles, Earth Angel |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
Curious form. I enjoyed your attempt. But I wonder . . . Given your title, the words "green" and "brown" insist on being adjectives, not nouns. I would think that the first and last words should be nouns. And, what is the opposite of "green"? Not brown, I should think. Plainly, you mean life/death, but green/brown is a weak analogy since brown includes the primary colors in green. (just my two cents) -glider- |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
passing shadows, Thanks. See you again sometime. Sadelite Earth Angel, Thank you. Economical is a very good way to describe it! Take care. wandering glider, Glad you wandered this way, and thanks for your reply. As you might have read, this is my first attempt--still learning. I, too, questioned whether I should use green and brown, but thought that possibly they could be considered nouns, also. I really didn't check out Merriam Webster until I read your post. I found that they could be either an adjective or a noun, depending. As to your comment about green and brown being a weak analogy, you're probably right, however, there are different hues/shades of brown and green leaves. I don't have a good color wheel handy, but I do know that red and green are complimentary colors. I suspect that since brown has red in it, that somewhere across on a color wheel one might find a greenish something. (As I think I understand, tertiary colors can also have their own complementary colors.) I know, this might be stretching it, but it was worth a try! Thanks for your comments--I like courteous critical thinkers. That's the way we learn. Sadelite |
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