Non American Beauty ( Wranx's challenge)

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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-11-14 02:43 PM

Here...I offer not only apologies ot the wrier it is intended to emulate, but may have to offer cash to avoid being sued... lol

Long stemmed waves
Failed to wipe the black ash
Dropped from your lips to mine
As we sat in tangles of shadow
Waiting for another silk screened morning
To be delivered

You said the night matched my eyes
Dark though the stars in refusal
Of anything but modern plastic
To cover up the nakedness
You saw beneath

I hold the bouquet
Offered to the sea that night
Only in blank verse

Cause words of you
Don’t rhyme

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (11-14-2003 02:47 PM).]

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

1 posted 2003-11-14 02:47 PM

Ooooh, I am KEEPING this one !! I love it...love it!!

Let your life lightly dance on the edges of Time like dew on the tip of a leaf. -Tagore

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

2 posted 2003-11-14 02:59 PM

I know who the writer is ~ it's you! And I know who you are referring to! ~ It's me! I'm a "Non-American Beauty"! Well, at least I'm non-American! ~ I'm Canadian! lol

It all seriousness, I am intrigued as to who this "Beauty" truly is and whose style you are emulating! Whomever, whatever, this was a delightful poem!

EA

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (11-14-2003 03:03 PM).]

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

3 posted 2003-11-14 03:00 PM

All I know is its damn good to see you writing in bunches Ron..awesome work

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2003-11-14 03:01 PM

I think I know this one
oh mann I am wayy off . . .
it sounds like Mikey to me
a fine write Ron
xxoo

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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2003-11-14 03:05 PM

Sue get's the extra points... lol...

Now Mike... don't hate me... please?

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

6 posted 2003-11-14 03:08 PM

OMG you did a fine job
twas the black ash
the sea
and the ending lines
yep . .
*smile*
xxoo

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2003-11-14 03:08 PM

Mike will beam.
I know I am.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2003-11-14 03:55 PM

(sigh) Oh Ron, this is beautiful, sweet friend, mad, I think not, as a true poet always is free to explore other forms and patterns and you do justice to him so well here! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

9 posted 2003-11-14 06:15 PM

once again, i am the clueless one,
but quite effective and stirring nevertheless

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (11-14-2003 06:18 PM).]

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

10 posted 2003-11-14 06:20 PM

Excellent...and so like Mike!
Hugs~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

11 posted 2003-11-14 10:07 PM

Yep...you nailed it!

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

12 posted 2003-11-14 11:42 PM

Yummmmm!!!! ~K~

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

13 posted 2003-11-15 12:01 PM

BRAVO!!!
Ron, you emulate better than anyone else!

what exactly does that mean?
LOL.
I think I just saw Mikey grinning.
Or was that the moon?

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

14 posted 2003-11-15 12:18 PM

You've done a fair days work here, m'friend.

I'm happy that you enjoyed yourself. I have truly enjoyed your contributions...

Don't be a stranger, eh?

Ed

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

15 posted 2003-11-15 01:42 AM

Ah, yes! Now I see it! It truly is our beloved Mikey! Captain, you've done him proud, I'm sure!

You did a wonderful job with this challenge!

to both you and Mike!

Linda

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

16 posted 2003-11-16 04:32 PM

I didn't guess the mask you were wearing... but I sure liked the poem! *S*

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