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jellybeans
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0 posted 2003-11-14 09:37 AM


hands clasped around knees she sits
unmoving, for these
are the days when the trees
are crying

contrasted by the dark threatening sky
their tears fall silently one
on top of the other

hands clasped around knees she sits
unmoving, grieving
with the trees

she could be raking, tidying the disorder
bagging and tying up the
weeping, but

at this moment nourishment
need not be utilized
it will be stored for future
growing

now is time for all that is
unfaithful to be
leaving

hands clasped tight she sits
unmoving, for these
are the days
for crying

[This message has been edited by jellybeans (11-14-2003 09:39 AM).]

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Elan
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State of Wide Eye
1 posted 2003-11-14 09:43 AM



I know this mourning time,
and you've done others
a service, by depicting
the ache so well.


Cpat Hair
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2 posted 2003-11-14 09:48 AM


hugs my friend...

sometimes the hug of self is all the comfort afforded us...

jellybeans
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3 posted 2003-11-14 10:06 AM


thank you elan, I wasn't sure, I know the feeling, but did not know if I had the words to depict it

cpat thank you my friend, learning to recognize and meet ones own needs is a step forward, I hope anyway...hugs back

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2003-11-14 11:29 AM


Lady~
Perhaps without knowing ... you have written the mourning of me~

This will touch me for a long, long time~
I read it ... and realized that I needed to go out into the warmth of the sun ... wrap my arms around my knees and rock it out of me~

I can't come up with the proper words to let you know just how much I NEEDED this~
But please know that I did~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
5 posted 2003-11-14 11:31 AM


You truly did capture a mourning moment with your photographic pen.


EA

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2003-11-14 12:10 PM


jellybeans,
Well done, enjoyed the read.

passing shadows
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displaced
7 posted 2003-11-14 12:12 PM


I have scheduled days for crying...it's good to get it out now and then

love this write *and you*

jellybeans
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8 posted 2003-11-14 06:18 PM


Marge, our lives do seem to be mirror images in a lot of instances...hope the sunshine served you well ...hugs

ea, thank you so much, I mostly do not feel my finished product is what I desired it to be, so I appreciate your comments

seymore, thank you appreciate your comments

ps, yes, tis good to cry, its even better when you know why you need to cry..

suthern
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9 posted 2003-11-16 04:20 PM


From the first verse, I felt your words instead of just reading them. *S* This is excellent, lady.
Honeybee
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10 posted 2003-11-16 09:42 PM


Like Marge, I also needed this.  I'm at a loss for words to convey how much you always touch me with your poetry, you're one of the finest poets here.

Melissa~

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Balladeer
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11 posted 2003-11-16 11:05 PM


Sometimes it is best to let the leaves fall - no raking, no tying - just letting them fall until the wind takes them away. Eventually new buds will form and life will renew itself once again...
GG
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Lost in thought
12 posted 2003-11-16 11:28 PM


I guess I needed this too... alot.
I'm gonna store this in my library because I don't have time to cry right now... but I need to.... soon.
Thank you for this... and sorry you feel this.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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