navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #29 » Between the Words
Open Poetry #29
Post A Reply Post New Topic Between the Words Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Greeneyes
Deputy Moderator 50 ToursDeputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2003-11-10 10:06 AM



{Beautiful vacancy,
of one still moment}


We have moved into history
   a river, slowed by many bends

I gathered to renew
  at the edge

So I held my arms up --
   my palms extending upward
too feel the   sweet  memory   of you
  bestow  so softly

      {so softly love}
upon my eyes, and   body

Your hands, found    my journals,
   my letters--    boxes  of
gentle     tears   silk and color

     {“Don’t be afraid to cry
     and watch me sleep”}


Your whisper   --  
surrounded my shoulders
   in a shroud of light
I need to touch,
that    point    --    where
reflection, and body   join

All   day      heavy rain --
I wanted to walk at midnight
stare among  and with    the full moon --
watch    shadows   dance
         beneath me

         I seek your face,
for my fingers to
trace the outline of your lips
     how erotic my naked words,
you, the words, between the words

leaving    me with sad eyes
   I have faced that demon,
more then once, more then twice—

How long   I stood
between    worlds

    waiting, waiting


{counting the moments,        the hours}

Wild storms    moved forth
I felt no release, I felt no rest—

Should I write of this now?
   or wait until  first snowfall,
when skies are gray, bursting with
cold      ice

I wonder what waits    hidden  -
    from what my eyes might see
wicks of candles melting slowly  —

   {in the notebook I scribble  only words}

Deep within the mystic

my fingers recall the color of your
smile    

Silk, with touch

i carry your heart with me
i am never without it
you are what a moon has always meant sky of sky
the wonder that keeps stars apart-
e.e.cummings

© Copyright 2003 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
Cpat Hair
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Patricius
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

1 posted 2003-11-10 10:13 AM


Should I write of this now?
   or wait until  first snowfall,
when skies are gray, bursting with
cold      ice


now perhaps.. is a better time than then...

as always my friend.. you amaze me.

Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
2 posted 2003-11-10 10:25 AM


GreenEyes~

'a river, slowed by many bends

I gathered to renew
  at the edge'


Oh my ... the complete beauty of this~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
       noles1@totcon.com   

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
3 posted 2003-11-10 10:30 AM


Lauren...this is so beautiful.  


"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

garysgirl
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237
Florida, USA
4 posted 2003-11-10 10:35 AM


  I seek your face,
for my fingers to
trace the outline of your lips
     how erotic my naked words,
you, the words, between the words



Lauren, absolutely beautiful!!
Hugs  
Ethel

Opeth
Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543
The Ravines
5 posted 2003-11-10 11:14 AM


"We have moved into history
   a river, slowed by many bends"


~ I have navigated that particular river.

Anyway, this was just plain lovely... ample imagery and thought-provoking, indeed.

Enjoyed!

"If this grand panorama before me is what you call God...then God is not dead."

James_A_Fraser
Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines
6 posted 2003-11-12 06:03 PM


I love the way you carry tension. Even a relatively long poem like this one stays dramatic all the way through. That's a gift, in addition to being the result of hard work and a lot of pencil sharpening!
BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
7 posted 2003-11-12 06:12 PM


you, the words, between the words

leaving    me with sad eyes
   I have faced that demon,
more then once, more then twice—

How long   I stood
between    worlds

Lauren, I felt every word of this.
Just lovely, you~

vandana
Deputy Moderator 5 Tours
Member Patricius
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463
USA
8 posted 2003-11-12 06:55 PM


very nice
Duncan
Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455

9 posted 2003-11-12 07:48 PM


"         I seek your face,
for my fingers to
trace the outline of your lips
     how erotic my naked words,
you, the words, between the words

leaving    me with sad eyes
   I have faced that demon,
more then once, more then twice—

How long   I stood
between    worlds

    waiting, waiting


{counting the moments,        the hours}

Wild storms    moved forth
I felt no release, I felt no rest—

Should I write of this now?
   or wait until  first snowfall,
when skies are gray, bursting with
cold      ice"

It's a good day to be back at PIP.  Amazing, yes.  


Hockeychick19
Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 430
Massachusetts, USA
10 posted 2003-11-12 09:03 PM


Lauren,

This is a great piece! you're very talented... and I enjoyed this.

~Kelly~

Life is a gift so live it to the fullest!

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
11 posted 2003-11-12 09:18 PM


stunning as always
Mistletoe Angel
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 Tours
Member Empyrean
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon
12 posted 2003-11-12 09:59 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, your words always reveal such special treasures and inspirations and gems of beauty and comfort, yay! (kiss on cheek) Your poetry is always a treasure chest that one can explore in, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
13 posted 2003-11-13 04:06 AM


damn...what a moment
Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #29 » Between the Words

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary