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littlewing
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0 posted 2003-11-07 11:13 PM



Where the earth ends and the sky begins
is a fine line drawn
etched in grey smog
something spoke to me
as a lone bird soar
carbon in hand
canvas before me
hands shaking

mimicking the rumble of the subway beneath me

I tried, in earnest
to purge this creeping molten weight
boring a whole in my innards
and with each breath
every whisp of wind
that subway shook
and the carbon fell
dropping to
that fine line
where the earth ends and the sky begins

-----------------------------------------------

Thank you, Liz

© Copyright 2003 Sue Eckam - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-11-08 01:09 AM




(sigh) Wow, your voice sure triumphantly reigned here like the thunder of an oncoming train, sweet friend, when you see the ash sparkle in the light you can see so much more, yay, this is wonderful and Liz is truly an inspiration too, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sue, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

brian sites
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2 posted 2003-11-08 01:21 AM


Sue ..
you are writing so lyrically and beautiful these days

it is like a damburst

and it is wonderful to behold

this is singing

Kaoru
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3 posted 2003-11-08 02:38 AM


Something she and even I will appreciate
passing shadows
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4 posted 2003-11-08 03:04 AM


gorgeous writing
Wind
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5 posted 2003-11-08 10:13 AM


Suuue! thats 10 times better than I could've made it..

thank you so much for this

What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall?
All walls are great, if the roof doesn't fall.
-yorke/bjork

LeeJ
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6 posted 2003-11-08 11:35 AM


There is so much more when we open our eyes
so much more...this was a lovely write.

wranx
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7 posted 2003-11-08 12:25 PM


Susielove, it looks like you've taken another giant step forward in this journey of discovery.

VERY nicely done!

(Actually, this may be your best)

And Susie?  

"In looking Northward, I see a light"


Wind
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8 posted 2003-11-08 05:10 PM


forgot to put in my library

What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall?
All walls are great, if the roof doesn't fall.
-yorke/bjork

littlewing
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9 posted 2003-11-08 05:33 PM


Noah, thank you . . . this is from one line Liz jotted down and I ran with it
(she has a bunch of these)

Bri . . oops
thank you so much
from you . . . this brings me smiles
see?  
xxoo

Meg - very cool
two birds with one stone
thank you

Thanks Dix

Liz, no , thank you . .  and I
seriously doubt that . . . I just yanked from you
but glad you liked it
*smile*
(there is another line I am dying
to snag, too)

Lee , yes so very true thank you

Baby? really?  That honors me
that you think so
*big smiles*
  

Liz, thank you so much . . .
for allowing me to use this line
and so happy I stumbled upon it
and you

Thanks guys
xxoo


  


Wind
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10 posted 2003-11-08 05:41 PM


I'm taking the sleep line, and writing one for you

What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall?
All walls are great, if the roof doesn't fall.
-yorke/bjork

Margherita
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11 posted 2003-11-08 05:44 PM


Wonderful.

To be able to grow into the sky ... out of those noisy boundaries ... that's the miracle.

Love and hugs. Margherita

littlewing
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12 posted 2003-11-09 12:47 PM


Liz, I adored it!
Please put it here
just like you have it
thank you so much
and you have done better
with that line
*smile*

Ohh Margherita  . . thank you so very much

Thanks guys
xxoo

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