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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
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under her feet in the circle of another face she listens to the squeal of a mouth left jammed in the hinged horizon three autumns ago her eyes lift up and she finds her mood hanging there behind the moon loose her body opens and shuts like a whore bending on time and she is nothing like Mary who has suffered the wickedness of the sun but a gutless conception baptised by fish and the drag of Pacific under her feet Angel of Darkness November 6th 2003 fate is not just whose cooking smells good but which way the wind blows (Ani DiFranco) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (11-06-2003 01:05 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Angel Now that is dark, good write. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Aches bella, I like were you went with this gritty and powerful, just hurts that you hurt..hugs |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I don't know that this is so dark, but certainly haunting of those things we go through, thinking we can put them aside, only to rise again, in a full moon... when the coyote howls, or the surf sings... Well done, Maree. Very well done. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree...Amazing images and feel to this...such original use of language to convey emotion! Hugs! |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Enjoyed the read, especially this line."her eyes lift up and she finds her mood". Extremely visual for me. Nice write. poe If nothing is something |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
her eyes lift up and she finds her mood hanging there behind the moon loose Maree, I love this poem. It is full of emotion. Thanks for sharing it.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Seymour: thank you Sir. Bello: I'm glad you like and don't worry m'friend I'm ok  Karilea: Thank you Sunshinygirl Martie: thank you and mysticpoe: Thanks for popping by and having a read and thank you for youe lovely reply.  Ethel: Glad to share it dear and thank you for your lovely reply fate is not just |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
bump |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A stellar read, Darksis! And LOOK! You've written it in the future! (We'll have to wait a whole year to see it posted) (And I thought there was just a 14 hour time difference...Sheesh!) Bro |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Bello? you're Bello Bro? HAHAHAHAHAH hehehehe I can't believe I did that. lol sheeesh. thanks for pointing it out and for your lovely reply. ahem.  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Maree: I didnt reply right away because to be honest , I had this whole biblical Mary Mother, magdelene snake thing goin on here . . . *smile* sometimes I just need to see the surface and lend and *smile* also the date yes had me thinking apocalyptic yes, I know . . . sheesh Beautiful imagery always from you xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (11-06-2003 09:22 AM).] |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Hard but good. This is an excellent piece of poetry, DA. The atmosphere you create here is simply haunting. Glad I dropped in. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
WOW...what do I say to THIS? First off this is exceptional writing even though it's very dark. You always write with such vivid emotion. One can't but help to feel your words, and feel this I did! Just awesome imagery...I don't know what else to say. I'm actually speechless. Take care. Amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Maybe I'll just give you a ring... Outstanding as always Mmy. JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
well done |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Maree, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I too know how everything revolves you such this way as though I am not depressed anymore, the nightmares of my childhood still keep coming back on visiting rotation! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is very heartfelt, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maree, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
wow. "go out into the deep" said Christ. and you do lady, you do. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
SB... I know. Sue, littleone.. thank you dear, sorry to confuse you with the date. James, thank you.. I'm glad you dropped in too Amy, thanks hon... you're always kind with your replies. Jamie, a ring? yes please I'l lbe waitingby the phone my lil poohbear Thanks sweetie. Brad, thank you so much. Noah, thank you dear. Karen, and e me. thank you. |
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