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rambling_words
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London, Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2003-11-04 06:16 PM


The wind is cool this afternoon
reminding me of a December day when she left
rain hangs in the air waiting to fall
drowning sorrows in the clutter drains of streets
no Indian summer sun to brighten the colours of the leaves
as they gather in beds under a dying oak tree
no crisp crunch under our bodies only a damp wet feeling of loss
as I think of ten months of nothing from someone who meant everything
but is really nothing but a wasting thought of today
starved in the harvest of tomorrow and initialed in the bark of yesterday
it was more need than love
it is more love than need
that I need right now
as September turns into October.



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1 posted 2003-11-04 06:19 PM


every single word, touched me....
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2 posted 2003-11-04 06:40 PM


John~
Just LOVE the title of this one~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
     noles1@totcon.com     

Duncan
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3 posted 2003-11-04 07:11 PM


"it was more need than love
it is more love than need
that I need right now
as September turns into October."

Another impressive write.  I do like the way you set a scene.

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Canada eh.
4 posted 2003-11-04 07:17 PM


Simply beautiful..even in the 75 degree temps today.
Loved this!
Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

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displaced
5 posted 2003-11-05 03:56 AM


I think we all have reminders like that
Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2003-11-05 09:09 AM


"it was more need than love
it is more love than need"

Loved these lines!!

Susan

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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