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James_A_Fraser
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0 posted 2003-11-04 11:51 AM


Wild Bird Flying

See him fly, fly in the cage,
the wingtips beaten raw,
feathers shattered on the wires.
They could never carry him now
but still he flies, flies,
breast grinding the drawn steel,
head turned back, eyes that
stare in sightless horror,
confined, unconfinable.

Will will him to stop,
accept the boundary;
be the spider that would
wind hiis spirit in steel webs,
but he will only fly, fly,
blast the grid with remnants
of himself, a last flailing migration
into what he will be now:
dead, or if he fails,
less than dead,
accustomed.


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1 posted 2003-11-04 12:55 PM


the wingtips beaten raw,
feathers shattered on the wires.
They could never carry him now
but still he flies, flies,
breast grinding the drawn steel,
head turned back, eyes that
stare in sightless horror,
confined, unconfinable.

Some creatures should never be chained or caged... their beauty is dependent on their freedom... You've painted a stunning portrait of a breaking spirit.

dead, or if he fails,
less than dead,
accustomed.

And so much less than he should be... This is sheer excellence in writing... but breaks my heart to read the truth of it.

passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2003-11-04 12:57 PM


instinct

nice write

Martie
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3 posted 2003-11-04 08:18 PM


Jamie...Is it the cage itself I wonder, or just the idea that there is no way you can fly.  Very poignant poem, my friend.  Made me think of all my birds and wonder if they are happy.  
dingusjr
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since 2003-09-24
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Missouri
4 posted 2003-11-05 06:04 AM


Good stuff, here, Jamie!   Very powerful with much insight.  In some ways we
are all that bird.    Thanks,  Larry

Pilgrimage
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5 posted 2003-11-05 12:19 PM


Oh this one hurts me all the way through.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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