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wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2003-11-04 07:40 AM


Our last day
found me standing in two worlds

One foot in the past
the other
there with you

Both
hesitant to step into the future

The one that takes my hands
from your hips

And your breath
from my neck...

I love you

"In looking Northward, I see a light"


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ambrish
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since 2003-03-27
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1 posted 2003-11-04 07:44 AM


The one that takes my hands
from your hips

And your breath
from my neck...

I love you
       reveals your deep love
                          

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2003-11-04 08:39 AM


wranx
As light a touch as I've ever read.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
3 posted 2003-11-04 08:49 AM


Exquisite.

May your love for one another continue to grow.

Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

littlewing
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4 posted 2003-11-04 08:52 AM


The house feels empty
since I stood and watched you
hand against the glass
heart upon the pane
as my own heart
stretched
as a rubberband would
as the car drove . . .

away . . .

I sit here now and the smell of US
is all around me
I want to bottle and savor it
like a fine wine
Uncorked and poured
breathing just enough
until it is time
to sip
a bit
I smell US within my clothes
on my hands
and in this air I breathe

I know that will never leave me, this scent

I want to capture it
within my palm
and hide it from the world
yet as the steam rises
I revel within our love, my soul
which I have just given to you,
and you in return to me
and I hesitate for awhile
reveling in this beauty
of US
this scent is all I have

as the water awaits  . . .


I love you too Eddie
xxoo

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
5 posted 2003-11-04 08:54 AM


ed i am just loving this it is like glitter in the air to me ...please keep it up...i am so enjoying it...how beautiful you and suz look in love...h
Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2003-11-04 08:57 AM


*sniff* so beautiful..

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

Midnitesun
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Gaia
7 posted 2003-11-04 10:39 AM


yep, sniffing here
but with a

you two are
poetry

Martie
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8 posted 2003-11-04 10:55 AM


Ed....I'm adding another sniff...this is so tenderly touching and heart wrenching at the same time.
Marge Tindal
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9 posted 2003-11-04 11:33 AM


Wranx~
How gentle ... how very tender and gentle~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
     noles1@totcon.com     

passing shadows
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displaced
10 posted 2003-11-04 12:48 PM


gah, this is sad
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11 posted 2003-11-04 12:57 PM


Dang!
suthern
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12 posted 2003-11-04 01:10 PM


Such a tender heart expression from both of you...

... remembering... *S*

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13 posted 2003-11-04 02:58 PM


The gift you give to one another....is both beautiful and priceless....
Lauren~

i carry your heart with me
i am never without it
you are what a moon has always meant sky of sky
the wonder that keeps stars apart-
e.e.cummings

garysgirl
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14 posted 2003-11-04 03:05 PM


Isn't love precious? You want to share the excitement and joy you feel with others, but you also want to keep it really close to you...so that you can protect it and keep it forever....
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15 posted 2003-11-04 08:20 PM


felt as a man feels, told as a man tells....

excellent, Ed.

Ed

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garysgirl
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16 posted 2003-11-05 02:09 AM


Isn't the leaving hard? But, you're still together,
even when apart. Right, LittleOne and Ed?
Hugs to you two  
Ethel

Dark Angel
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17 posted 2003-11-05 04:18 AM


God this is just so beautiful.

to you both.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


PouringJewels
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18 posted 2003-11-05 05:44 AM


Too much for me,being my brother and all. How do you spell oooouuuuwww? Susie, beautiful come back, but I can do without the smell. Just a little humor only I can get away with. Love you both.
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
19 posted 2003-11-05 09:10 AM


Just smiling...at both of you.
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20 posted 2003-11-05 09:12 AM


ya well, pardon me while I expire the entire box of Kleenex...dang.

I'm happy that the two of you found exactly what you are looking for...and more.

XOXO

Ya know what they say.  Curiosity salted the snail.

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
21 posted 2003-11-05 09:39 AM



May this be a never-ending true love--true life--story...


mysticpoe
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22 posted 2003-11-05 10:17 AM


wranx, nothing fancy about this one, and your still able to touch the spot. Nice write.

poe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

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