navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #29 » Gloom's Haiku
Open Poetry #29
Post A Reply Post New Topic Gloom's Haiku Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-11-03 03:52 PM




Leaf-like castanets
Dance on the wind dying down
Puddled skirt below


© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Enchantress
Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
1 posted 2003-11-03 03:58 PM


"Leaf-like castanets"

Beautiful Karilea...how I love the above image!

~Hugs and soft smiles~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

Duncan
Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455

2 posted 2003-11-03 05:38 PM


Hey Kari...I think I like it!  
Very cool images!

SEA
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 Tours
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676
with you
3 posted 2003-11-03 07:29 PM


love the images
littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
4 posted 2003-11-03 07:30 PM


This is lovely, sadly exactly what my neighborhood looks like right now
*smile*
xxoo

Marty Baird
Member
since 2003-09-20
Posts 90
Georgia, U.S.
5 posted 2003-11-03 07:58 PM


Nice to see how it should be done
Keep on with your good work

passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
6 posted 2003-11-04 03:29 AM


sigh
EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279

7 posted 2003-11-04 02:41 PM


Gloom's Haiku? Mmm...I do not deal with Haiku's well...but sometimes one gives me pause for thought. I tried picturing the images you wanted me to see. What I saw in the end was probably not what you intended so I will tell you. I see seeds twirling down from a tree...mayhap a maple tree though I do not know seeds that well. You know the kind I mean though...the whirly kind that spin round and round like helicopter blades. The kind we use to toss into the air as kids and watch. So I don't know if I can call the Haiku Gloom in my mind Sunshine for in my minds eye with that mental image all I can see is childrens smiles and happy squeals. (That is why poetry is an individual thing I suppose.) Well done!

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
8 posted 2003-11-04 02:47 PM


Well thank you, Evocative.  Yes, I know the seeds of which you speak.  

Professor Gloom wrote a poem a day or two back, and in that, I left this very haiku, as it was what HIS poem made me think of.  So, in essence, this Haiku was for Professor Gloom, as he inspired it.

But poetry is all in the eye of the reader.

Dixie, is that a satisfied sigh or a sad sigh?  

Thank you, Marty!

Yes, Sue, many neighborhoods are seeing slipped skirts about now...

SEA...thank you dear!  It's so good to have you back!

Duncan, you porch puppy...now YOU write one!

I like the images too, Enchantress.  Thank you!

garysgirl
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237
Florida, USA
9 posted 2003-11-04 02:54 PM


Karilea, isn't it wonderful how each individual can see different images from the same poem? I always enjoy your poems, as well as the replies they inspire. I read them even when I don't reply sometimes.
With love and hugs, my friend  
Ethel

scorpio
Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178
right...there
10 posted 2003-11-04 02:57 PM


You created a image with movement in my mind.

believe in what your heart feels...

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
11 posted 2003-11-04 03:00 PM



Ethel, it's so nice to know that you read them, and don't always feel the need to comment.  Sometimes, poetry moves me so much, I feel I just don't have the appropriate words to leave behind.  If you only knew how much I didn't respond to!   Thank you...

Scorpio, from my mind to yours.  I hope you enjoyed.  Thank you!

vandana
Deputy Moderator 5 Tours
Member Patricius
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463
USA
12 posted 2003-11-04 06:51 PM


nice
garysgirl
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237
Florida, USA
13 posted 2003-11-04 07:27 PM


Karilea, that's how I am. I just can't find
the words at times to say what I would like
in response to a poem. So, I just don't say
anything...especially when I get in my quiet
moods. For instance, yesterday I read a lot of
poems, but only replied to three or four, I
think. I will admit, though, that I don't get into
those "quiet moods" very often. LOL

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-04-2003 07:28 PM).]

Lotus Breeze
Member
since 2003-09-06
Posts 112

14 posted 2003-11-04 07:43 PM



Color leaves falling,
Sunset in sky painting trees
In morning they lay

I add a haiku, that can be fun of their writing
Much enjoy yours

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #29 » Gloom's Haiku

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary